It seems to be in the middle of your story and I see no second page available. Did you submit the whole story or have they made an error in posting the entire story?
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Anonymous03/14/14
just teasing
had my interest in the lady but then it ended. nice job of priming us for whatever lol
It is well written for what is there and the premise is hot. I'm sure this boozed up broad hasn't gotten pounded hard in decades. It's important when you live in close proximity to be good neighbors and I'm sure our studly hero is up to the task of taking good care of this woman's needs. One point of note. NO straight man of 24 in the U. S. would ever wear a thong. That's for middle aged gay men so I'd encourage you to know your characters. But overall, a good start and I'm looking forward to the next installment.
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Anonymous03/16/14
You gotta be kidding
Do you get some kind of pleasure out of wasting readers' time?
If every author followed your approach, there would be no readers at all.
Did this pass the acceptance criteria for stories, or is there none?
You gotta be kidding!
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Anonymous03/17/14
Busy
waiting to find out where her ass goes after being up against his knee. But he will be busy being careful, because even though his cock is 9 inches long, it's only 4 inches in circumference.
Wow. It might snap. You'd'a thought that with 9 inches, a 30 inch waist and a 44 chest, you would have inflated him to at least 6 inch circumference. Maybe it'll thicken up with use.....
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Where is the rest of this story???
It seems to be in the middle of your story and I see no second page available. Did you submit the whole story or have they made an error in posting the entire story?
just teasing
had my interest in the lady but then it ended. nice job of priming us for whatever lol
Not enough
Author should have waited to publish until he had more content. Good start of a story.
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Insert negative comment here.
He Could Not Finish The Story**
That 9by4 got in the way. What a piece pof crap!!!!!!!
and....???????
terrible!!!
what more can u say, i know awful too
Post a whole story or don't post at all!!!
Why post just the first few paragraphs of a story?
be afraid
be very afraid
Yes the story is brief, but...
It is well written for what is there and the premise is hot. I'm sure this boozed up broad hasn't gotten pounded hard in decades. It's important when you live in close proximity to be good neighbors and I'm sure our studly hero is up to the task of taking good care of this woman's needs. One point of note. NO straight man of 24 in the U. S. would ever wear a thong. That's for middle aged gay men so I'd encourage you to know your characters. But overall, a good start and I'm looking forward to the next installment.
You gotta be kidding
Do you get some kind of pleasure out of wasting readers' time?
If every author followed your approach, there would be no readers at all.
Did this pass the acceptance criteria for stories, or is there none?
You gotta be kidding!
Busy
waiting to find out where her ass goes after being up against his knee. But he will be busy being careful, because even though his cock is 9 inches long, it's only 4 inches in circumference.
Wow. It might snap. You'd'a thought that with 9 inches, a 30 inch waist and a 44 chest, you would have inflated him to at least 6 inch circumference. Maybe it'll thicken up with use.....
Bullshit !!!!
Write the damn story before posting. this was a short page of introduction nothing more. this reader will not be back to this writer.....
time saved
im so glad i listened to my instincts and skipped to the comments after "paragraph"5 i hope many more people do the same
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