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Notchya average poem I'd say!
I like it but I don't get it. It sort of left me wondering, with no way to resolve it. Not your best, sweety, but really good!
Boo
The ol' Slip-notch around the neck
Not sure I get the end but This is really creepy,not in a bad way, but a give you chills way. I'm glad it's morning and not the midst of night.Good Halloween poem
Good, I think,
in an icky kind of way. The latter part seems to imply a single serial killer, but the first part implies what--Satanists? Vigilantes?
And "pendulous" doesn't seem right to me. Always a word I associate with something like jowly overweight people. I assume you mean to invoke a pendulum type motion. You might try to get "pendulum" or "metronome" in there as a simile or something (he says blabberingly).
But geez, pretty depressing subject matter. I hope I'll be able to sleep tonight.
tz
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