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by Anonymous03/10/14

It was a good story

It was an interesting read and will look for mire of your work

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by Anonymous03/12/14

You REALLY need and EDITOR.

The story shows promise, but before you possibly add another chapter, please get a good editor. PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, get a GOOD editor.

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by Anonymous03/12/14

Chill out

Its a good sex story. That's it. Why we expecting a work of art

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