Midnight Rendezvous

kinda like a bad Shakespeare act.

I am not sure if it is the formatting or the words you chose, but the meter seems to fall apart in some places. The lack of allegory (perhaps a misuse of) and abundance of analogy, makes the story rather monotonous. It is also difficult to determine the intentions of your two characters; at times they seem to be strictly malicious yet sometimes respond as if their intent is to punish wrongdoing. I have no desire to crush your passion of writing. It just seems that you can do better.