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A great tale with a difference. I hope you will keep writing with a new series soon.
TKU.
Great story
Hope you continue writing, even if the ending was three times as many chapters as the 'story' it was awesome to read. Thanks for sharing it.
Sad to see it end
Thank you for a wonderful story
I read the whole series
And would like to comment: The experiment of avoiding the names of the characters was (maybe?)interesting to the author but utterly distracting and finally annoying for this reader- In some scenes, I had a hard time knowing who was who. This is why I give it 4*...I did like the series; hot threesomes, exciting characters.
I do realize that this was a test, an experiment, and the author did warn the readers from the start.
I was pretty well hooked by the end of the first chapter.
And it just got better.
Had to reread a few paragraphs to figure who was who; a small distraction. I just gave my own names to the characters.
Was annoyed by a few big spelling errors: peak should be PEEK, evidentially- EVIDENTLY, etc. A big peeve of mine. Sorry. If I had more than just this damned Android, I'd be looking into editing or proofreading for obviously gifted writers such as yourself.
Really enjoyed the way you fleshed out the characters well to begin with and kept building to the end, the caring touches like the framed posters and the salesgirl's cancer and your subtle humor.
I'll be starting your other series as soon as I post this comment.
Thanks for your story.
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