What a great story, hot, hot, hot!!!
Please don't stop writing, you have a natural talent in turning me on, I love it and want you to keep doing it.
You don't live in Australia do you??? 😈😈😈
You are an immensely talented writer. Your writing is artful; it takes great skill to produce something as apparently effortless as this. In truth, writing of this caliber is astonishingly arduous. Thank you for the efforts that went into these your first work products.
The subject matter of your second submission ("Another Taste of Perfection") is more appealing to me than this one, but that's a matter of personal, individual taste. I look forward to following your further contributions.
You could ratchet up the technical level of your writing by studying the correct usage of the intransitive verb "lie" (past tense: lay, past participle: lain) versus the transitive verb "lay" (past tense: laid, past participle: laid). 99% of Literotica writers are clueless on this score, but you deserve to put yourself in the top 1%!
Who am I to judge? But I damn well love the way you think, and write. So sexy, raw, wet, hot...more please!
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Anonymous09/21/14
Mom has got to join!
That Mom was wrong to demand that her daughter eat her pussy and fuck her with dildos, but a beautiful step daughter - that is less a problem, and would be really hot!
Please give us a chapter with that scene.
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Wicked, I'm so frigging turned on.
What a great story, hot, hot, hot!!!
Please don't stop writing, you have a natural talent in turning me on, I love it and want you to keep doing it.
You don't live in Australia do you??? 😈😈😈
please write more...
very hot, but way too short! write more!
Was hoping mom would join...
Good start,
Good start, helped me cum, please write more!
Gotta love rape!
Verrrry promising start...
An excellent opening chapter! I'm eagerly anticipating Part Two!
AND A WRITING STAR IS BORN
Very nicely done. Did the topless step daughter have a clean or hirsute vagina? put some hair on something to keep some contrast to your characters.
A magnificent start!
You are an immensely talented writer. Your writing is artful; it takes great skill to produce something as apparently effortless as this. In truth, writing of this caliber is astonishingly arduous. Thank you for the efforts that went into these your first work products.
The subject matter of your second submission ("Another Taste of Perfection") is more appealing to me than this one, but that's a matter of personal, individual taste. I look forward to following your further contributions.
You could ratchet up the technical level of your writing by studying the correct usage of the intransitive verb "lie" (past tense: lay, past participle: lain) versus the transitive verb "lay" (past tense: laid, past participle: laid). 99% of Literotica writers are clueless on this score, but you deserve to put yourself in the top 1%!
Good?
Who am I to judge? But I damn well love the way you think, and write. So sexy, raw, wet, hot...more please!
Mom has got to join!
That Mom was wrong to demand that her daughter eat her pussy and fuck her with dildos, but a beautiful step daughter - that is less a problem, and would be really hot!
Please give us a chapter with that scene.
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