Another Matt Moreau imitator. The wife is a pig fucking whore. The cucky husband would not DREAM of divorcing the whore or fucking another woman because he luuurves his pig whore wife SO MUCH.
Only would happen in an alternate universe, johnthechaosman. Or in your wimp pussy boy faggot brain.
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Anonymous03/13/14
1/5. But only because if it was "just sex", why the compulsion to cheat?
If its no big deal, why have an affair? Unless, of course it IS a big deal...
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Anonymous03/13/14
Hey guys! This is only chapter 1!
Before you unload on the author too much, remember this is only chapter one, and it is starting with the (sorely abused) husband seeing a woman who he finds really attractive. This could go in a direction where the new woman ends up with the slut's husband because she doesn't control her urges.... wouldn't that be poetic justice?
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Anonymous03/13/14
What now?
I can guess where this might be going in the future installments. Seems interesting, sort of. I'll wait in judgement.
First, if it's a true addiction, there is counseling to help with that.
Second, if she wants to be treated like a slut, get fucked like an animal,TELL him! Most guys would like to do that, but are afraid their wives will be pissed off.
Interesting start. I can't wait for the next installment. Keep writing!
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Anonymous03/13/14
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Throw us a bone. The main character has to at least have one sexual encounter before you end the first chapter. This is not a good sign for Chapter 2.
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Anonymous03/13/14
Sorry, you lost this reader 3/4 through
Going over marriage vows 3/4 of the way through; character left out "forsaking all others." Key vow that cheaters like to overlook & disregard. Loyalty is key to a true marriage. Open marriage; not really a marriage, just a couple living together with benefits. He's weak & unwilling to put her in her place (another version of "tough-love") and, she's nothing but the village bicycle; everyone's had a ride.
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Anonymous03/14/14
Another cheating slut and spineless husband
Not one single interesting, clever or entertaining thing in this whole mess. A complete waste of space.
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Anonymous03/14/14
A plot twist ...
that might have led to a better than average story is incompetently and lazily executed.
I won't even bother reading the rest what a waste of mine and your time could anyone possibly call themselves a man after this and multiple times " shoot the bitch and then he can service all the other personers like the bitch he is"
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Anonymous04/16/14
whats wrong with you twisted fuckers who condem writers ?
You dont like it... why are you reading this type of story . Such vindictive stupidity. Read elsewhere OR be constructive. Simple.
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Anonymous08/06/14
While agreeing with the previous Anon about bombing writers
I do think it's wrong to bomb the author. At least he or she was making an effort and posting something, unlike most of us that sit on the sidelines and snipe. But I don't think it's wrong to express a dislike for the story. Whether it was badly written from a technical standpoint or it was a bad plot line how does an author know what went over well? This was the latter. Why would the husband accept having a cheating slut for a wife? Why be married. I simply don't like this particular storyline. A wife that clearly demonstrates by her actions that she has neither love or respect for her husband. And a husband that won't really do anything about her cheating. What about his health if she brings home a nice disease? Why is he wasting money tricking the whore? It makes no sense. It's totally implausible. That's why I hated this story.
God, you're STUPID
Another Matt Moreau imitator. The wife is a pig fucking whore. The cucky husband would not DREAM of divorcing the whore or fucking another woman because he luuurves his pig whore wife SO MUCH.
Only would happen in an alternate universe, johnthechaosman. Or in your wimp pussy boy faggot brain.
1/5. But only because if it was "just sex", why the compulsion to cheat?
If its no big deal, why have an affair? Unless, of course it IS a big deal...
Hey guys! This is only chapter 1!
Before you unload on the author too much, remember this is only chapter one, and it is starting with the (sorely abused) husband seeing a woman who he finds really attractive. This could go in a direction where the new woman ends up with the slut's husband because she doesn't control her urges.... wouldn't that be poetic justice?
What now?
I can guess where this might be going in the future installments. Seems interesting, sort of. I'll wait in judgement.
This may be a good story or it may
turn out boring like Bored Fran. Both of his stories need a great ending to pull them out of the wimpy column.
These Stories Are Getting Old
First, if it's a true addiction, there is counseling to help with that.
Second, if she wants to be treated like a slut, get fucked like an animal,TELL him! Most guys would like to do that, but are afraid their wives will be pissed off.
Interesting start. I can't wait for the next installment. Keep writing!
* * *
Throw us a bone. The main character has to at least have one sexual encounter before you end the first chapter. This is not a good sign for Chapter 2.
Sorry, you lost this reader 3/4 through
Going over marriage vows 3/4 of the way through; character left out "forsaking all others." Key vow that cheaters like to overlook & disregard. Loyalty is key to a true marriage. Open marriage; not really a marriage, just a couple living together with benefits. He's weak & unwilling to put her in her place (another version of "tough-love") and, she's nothing but the village bicycle; everyone's had a ride.
Another cheating slut and spineless husband
Not one single interesting, clever or entertaining thing in this whole mess. A complete waste of space.
A plot twist ...
that might have led to a better than average story is incompetently and lazily executed.
He is settling for less than what he deserves.
This story is like a train wreck...
... so horrific that I just have to read on.
so terrible
I won't even bother reading the rest what a waste of mine and your time could anyone possibly call themselves a man after this and multiple times " shoot the bitch and then he can service all the other personers like the bitch he is"
whats wrong with you twisted fuckers who condem writers ?
You dont like it... why are you reading this type of story . Such vindictive stupidity. Read elsewhere OR be constructive. Simple.
While agreeing with the previous Anon about bombing writers
I do think it's wrong to bomb the author. At least he or she was making an effort and posting something, unlike most of us that sit on the sidelines and snipe. But I don't think it's wrong to express a dislike for the story. Whether it was badly written from a technical standpoint or it was a bad plot line how does an author know what went over well? This was the latter. Why would the husband accept having a cheating slut for a wife? Why be married. I simply don't like this particular storyline. A wife that clearly demonstrates by her actions that she has neither love or respect for her husband. And a husband that won't really do anything about her cheating. What about his health if she brings home a nice disease? Why is he wasting money tricking the whore? It makes no sense. It's totally implausible. That's why I hated this story.
Uncanny
Great story, been there.
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