Saturday Morning Cartoons

Chapter 2

Please write a sequel to Saturday Morning Cartoons. The characters were well developed and believable. It started out a little slow but was Hot at the end. That said,,the way you ended it left left me feeling only half full, unsatisfied as a reader and wanting more.. Please write a chapter 2, and finish the story at a more natural point. The hard part (developing the characters and plot line) is already done.

Yes Yes Yes

Everything they said and then some more......... Chapters, that is....... ;-)

Great story...... I loved it........ It's heart breaking, it's soft, it's sweet, it's sexy and I suspect they fall in love....... they seem to be made for each other.....

Please Chapter two

Fantastic story great build up good advice. Don not leave us hanging.

Should I have to add to the vote?

A chapter 2 please - with a nice, fairytale ending.

More Please

Please wright a second chapter soon. thanks in advance

Oh did you not notice you were not finished

Lets step right on in there and pump out a few more chapters.Come on now lets get with the program.

deserves a negative vote

this deserves a negative vote for failure to finish and for failure to properly edit before posting. a real writer would be ashamed to post an unfinished, unedited story like this.

Yeah, someone should be flogged for not having another chapter after that fucking awesome teaser! Lol. ...but I didn't notice enough to bother with bitching about editing. Hell, you should have seen the last travesty I read on here, lol.

I have to fix sis, then mom......

Close call, had me there with you. Now for those leaving negative comments.....Go Fuck yourselves!! Remember these are fantasy stories, why poo poo any kind of fantasy? Do chapter two by tying up dad with a fish stuffed in his mouth while you throat fuck his`wife!!?? Claim sis and mom, no sharing, only pussies share their women. If I didn't like your story I would have said ....."it gave me a soft-on" I couldn't write anything clever enough to get two paragraphs. Tweek the "vanilla" sex a bit....turn your sisters ex lover into one of your "tricks" who worships your cock just to help her "get over" her sadness.

Great fun brother/sister!

Great idea with how they slipped into having sex together. I loved how he told her the truth about guys and how every word of it rang true. That's just how guys are!

cartoons

You might want to start a new category called tutorial. This would be the study guide. 5 star all the way.

cartoon

wait is that all???

right

i wish he would make a series out of this, it would be so very good

This can't be all!!!

I would pay to see this one continue!!!

ANY MISTAKES YOU SEE ARE STILL ALL MINE

She breathed in deep the steam (AWKWARDLY EXPRESSED THIS WAS!!!!) (YODA????)
skinny dipping (skinny-dipping)
any more (anymore)
eying my coffee with a near lust (POORLY WORDED!!!!)
you naught girl (naughty)
drug junky (CLUMSY!!!!)
tossed it back in one long (-sip) (gulp)
half-a-pot (a half pot)
boyfriends (boyfriend’s)
roof tops (rooftops)
through (-to) door (the)
out (of) the way
blushed beautiful (beautifully)
met (meet)
Drama (drama)
straight up questing (questioning)
it's hood (its)
over powering (overpowering)
over stuffed pillowed cushions (overstuffed pillow)
striped it off (stripped)

Amazing

I'm one of those, "I've been a long time Literotica reader and have never commented on a story" guys. This is, by far, my favorite story to date. You are an amazing writer and I can vividly picture everything I read. Keep on being amazing! And also, will there be a part 2?

More please

where do they go from here. Gwen did say "later" and I would love to read that