Impressive writing. Very descriptive. If you really are 18, it's even more impressive. The pizza boy fantasy is as commonplace as the pool boy, naughty nurse and cheerleader fantasies, and yet you wrote it in such a way that the "old" felt "new" again. Kudos to you. I hope this is the beginning of a long career as a writer.
Thanks, anon, for correcting me. Being a perfectionist, once the math error was pointed out, it drove me nuts until I could fix it. Thanks for the tip (haha), and the story has now been edited to be mathematically accurate.
Wow even though this is your first story it seems like you put a whole lot of thought and time into this. Even though it was one scene (not that i'm complaining) but it felt like this was a real thing and that it actually happened. Hope you continue writing more stories.
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Not bad.
Outstanding debut!
Impressive writing. Very descriptive. If you really are 18, it's even more impressive. The pizza boy fantasy is as commonplace as the pool boy, naughty nurse and cheerleader fantasies, and yet you wrote it in such a way that the "old" felt "new" again. Kudos to you. I hope this is the beginning of a long career as a writer.
Wow! Basically, it was only one scene but it rocked! Thanks!
Math?
If she gave $15 wouldn't the tip have been 2.56?
Math, indeed
Thanks, anon, for correcting me. Being a perfectionist, once the math error was pointed out, it drove me nuts until I could fix it. Thanks for the tip (haha), and the story has now been edited to be mathematically accurate.
Wow even though this is your first story it seems like you put a whole lot of thought and time into this. Even though it was one scene (not that i'm complaining) but it felt like this was a real thing and that it actually happened. Hope you continue writing more stories.
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