About your comments on being stale,I don't find them to be that.All writers find ways of writing that works for them,and it may not be every ones cup of tea.But you should write what works for you regardless of what others may think.I know that some may not like the Southern way of how you put and place things,but I for one do.Keep it up as best you can.I keep looking for new stories from you on a regular basis as well as rereading what you already have posted.Not sure which one that I would consider as a favorite,there are so many that I like,mainly in the romance and loving wives sections.
A lot of unlikeable people in this tale. But as they say, "All's well that ends well." Welcome back!
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Anonymous01/20/15
Welcome Back!
I've enjoyed working my way through your previous work, and am glad to see you back.
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Anonymous01/20/15
Glad you are back.
Poorly written stories get stale fast. Well written stories even of well known and worn story lines NEVER get stale. You are one of the finest writers here, and frankly it is highly unlikely your stories will ever get stale.
Welcome back and thank you for all of the fine stories you have written.
Dick Frances wrote a million stories about horse detectives, and Stang seems to have a gazillion stories...
I don't know, an enjoyable story is enjoyable. I think about writing but get caught up in the idea it'd never be unique... I think enjoyable is good. And your stories are better than good. Please, more.
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Anonymous01/20/15
I had missed you.
There are a few authors on this site that stand out, and you are one of them. I' glad you are back, thank you.
I don't find you work stale just entertaining. I've read through you repertoire from top to bottom and have hoped to see additions.
Thank you for the hard work and time. Please continue.
Woodmanone
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Anonymous01/20/15
ANOTHER GREAT STORY
glad to see you back.. sorry to hear bout you getting sick. I along with all your other fans have MISSED your GREAT writing....hope you finish some of your older stuff...such as LOOKIN FOR AN EDITOR and some others....although any story you write I enjoy...thanks for sharing your skills with this untalented slug...
but it lacked any pizzazz. He kept running into people he knew, everyone cheated and died, and life was total shit for most people. I prefer a little more of a plot. You've written some brilliant stories and have set your bar quite high. This is just average by your standards and pretty good by most others.
Kudos on breaking the ice on your involuntary (due to health, certainly not lack of inherent creativity ) writer's block
The narrator was a survivor and a cool operator. The other characters were disposable and mere pawns to be sacrificed for the object lesson of the previous five hundred words. In real life , things would have been a bit more complex because when you're dabbling with a loose woman and she gets in the family way, the resulting baby can't be treated like a gopher in the County Whack-a-mole game.
Does this story rate with your best fictional output ? I'm taking the fifth on that. The BIG picture is that its a new year and its great to see you back in the game . Thank you for sharing and thank you even more for the Literotica`proof of life . I'm hoping for the best possible outcome in terms of your health concerns.
I'm looking forward for any stories to emerge from spare time left over from your current ' Take your Vitamins and Grind thru Rehab ' regime, but mainly want your health to rebound. If you hold up half as well as your stories do on multiple rereads, there is considerable cause for optimism.
You have written some great stuff in the past, up with the best, but this falls way short.
It is crafted well enough so you haven't lost your technical skills. If I had to guess I would say you don't think much of the main character yourself, so why would we?
You are one of my few "Favorite Authors", and it's great to have you back, hope you're wrong and you're health does improve.
On to the story -
First, I was sad that things didn't work out with Chris, I know it would have been kind of a "fairy tale" ending, but what can I say, I like happy endings.
Next, I was worried that you were going to have him get back with Sandy. I'm glad you didn't, and I am glad that you gave her some karmic relief!
Finally, I figured he was going to hook up with the seller, completely forgot about Gloria, very nice twist!
While there are only a few variations of the themes we tend to read in this genre, your variations are always welcome.
Glad you're feeling better. Thanks for the tale.
Thanks for the offering. Always enjoy reading your work. Your efforts are appreciated.
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Anonymous01/20/15
Welcome Back
It's good to read you back again. My only criticism is that some of the names connected to (temporary) partners got quite confusing. Be careful and proof read.
Sorry to hear about your hand, but very happy to see you back. Your stories have a certain ironic humor to them that appeals to me and I would absolutely like to read more of them. I can appreciate the problem with the fingers besides typing. A person I know lost the feeling in their thumb and index finger on the dominant hand. Life changing issue having to look at everything you want to pick up or put down.
I read your addendum. I'm sorry you've been hurt and I need to check through your romances to find the one you commented on.
Good loving wives stories this last year has been pretty thin; too much of the 'happy cuckold' for me. I've got several outlined, but I'm bogged down with work and writer's ennui.
HDK was sort of right about this one, but I'm inclined to think it's more about the need to actually pay attention to what you've written.
I'm going to demur regarding two items in your story. First, your story covered at least two decades, and you had our protagonist personally repairing an apartment complex roof. Unless someone is a 'full time' roofer; that's a pretty risky thing to do. I haven't been on a roof since my forties for precisely that reason. Second, you were uncertain about the value of Gloria's house and she had an Olympic sized pool? Jeepers; that's a lot of pool, even for a deceased dentist!
This was a hands down five. I hope you get better, and please keep writing.
I just never get tired of good stories. I admit that some people are never happy with anything and always want some thing new and different every day. Somehow that does not sound to me like a recipe for cultural survival.
One comment I would make on the story is that with many others on the site sort of leads to a certain lack of faith in the survival of couples(families) and the idea of the State raising our children is definitely unattractive. So this trait does not does not sound like a survival trait..
I've seen your handle in the hall of fame so I appraoched this with high expectations but found it a little dull. Hope your health continues to improve. 3*
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Anonymous01/20/15
Welcome back!
Definitely one of my favorite authors. Suggestion: Dragon Naturally Speaking. I write for a living (but not creatively) and hurt my wrist a couple of years back. One of my friends uses DNS because of RA. I tried it and it is great.
It is not perfect, but I can dictated and then edit far more quickly than I can type.
I've read all of your stories and I know when I see your name I'm in for a good one. Happy to hear your back writing again and pray your health improves. Enjoyed this one just as much as the others keep up the good work and I look forward to your next endevor.
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Anonymous01/20/15
Sorry to hear about your health problems.wishing you. Well
You are one of the great one , writing stories. What ever sidelined you was tragic to you and us readers who love your work. Working with two fingers pretty much give s me an indication of what happened. I just hope you recover and are able to keep writing. A fan.
I'm a new kid on the block and when I checked your bio, I almost just gave you a 5 and not bother with a comment. After all, what can I say that others have not said much more eloquently? Just this: you covered an awful lot of time and characters in just three pages. Maybe it was just this dumb old country boy, but I had trouble keeping up with your transitions. Since it didn't seem to bother anybody else, I must be wrong, but I'm just saying....
BTW, I know where you're coming from with the numbness problem. I woke up about thirty years ago with all fingers on left hand numb. Doc. says I lost the sensory nerves, but not the motor nerves. Over time the first two fingers got a little better, but I still have to look at the keys and had to resort to the old two finger typing method. It's tough, but you might learn to adjust--I have. Cheers from the other Carolina.
Glad your are back. Try Dragon it might be very helpful. Good story and pretty good for someone with 3 fingers that work. good luck
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Anonymous01/20/15
Very nice little story
Glad to see you submitting again. I've always enjoyed your work. This was a good short story. I wish there were more writers submitting this quality of work. Keep on with the hunting and pecking on the keyboard. It's much appreciated.
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Anonymous01/20/15
Confused
Maybe I missed something, but didn't Chris become Sandy?
This is as always is a great story.
You brought the readers through the story, not knowing or expecting the ending it has.
I really enjoy your writing, keep it up.
Thanks
wanted you to know that 500 Annies and The Hit List (Chapt 4) are some of the best pieces of fiction I have ever read. Thx for the entertainment. You must be a good sport to be around in person.
this was not one of his better efforts. In fact, if this had been written by a lesser author, I would have stopped reading before the end of page 1. I'll pass more picky things directly to the author, but let me point out here what some of my bigger issues were: 1. There were too many wives, ex-wives, and hot dates mentioned on the first page. I cannot tell you how many of each Chill or Tony had. 2. The story did not always flow. Chill mentioned working overseas before he told us how and why he went to Saudi Arabia. 3. Way too many pronouns, especially considering the number of characters. At two points on page 2, I determined "he" = Tony. I looked back and found Tony's name last appeared four and six paragraphs earlier. 4. A number of characters appeared out of nowhere, and some were never mentioned again. Who was Ben?
I really enjoyed this one...even laughed out loud a couple of times. Glad to see you writing again, in my opinion, one of your stories with a recycled plot is better than a "new plot" by most others. Keep on writing!
Sorry to find out about your health problems; wishing you continued recovery. Great to have a Q story to read today! Thanks for writing. I liked the story.
English
So pleased...
that you have returned. High quality authors that haven't abandoned us (free readers) are rare.
Thank you...
Glad
You are back...please keep writing.
About your comments on being stale,I don't find them to be that.All writers find ways of writing that works for them,and it may not be every ones cup of tea.But you should write what works for you regardless of what others may think.I know that some may not like the Southern way of how you put and place things,but I for one do.Keep it up as best you can.I keep looking for new stories from you on a regular basis as well as rereading what you already have posted.Not sure which one that I would consider as a favorite,there are so many that I like,mainly in the romance and loving wives sections.
Nice Tale
A lot of unlikeable people in this tale. But as they say, "All's well that ends well." Welcome back!
Welcome Back!
I've enjoyed working my way through your previous work, and am glad to see you back.
Glad you are back.
Poorly written stories get stale fast. Well written stories even of well known and worn story lines NEVER get stale. You are one of the finest writers here, and frankly it is highly unlikely your stories will ever get stale.
Welcome back and thank you for all of the fine stories you have written.
Nice to have you back
You write with two fingers what people using ten can only dream of doing.
Stale?
Dick Frances wrote a million stories about horse detectives, and Stang seems to have a gazillion stories...
I don't know, an enjoyable story is enjoyable. I think about writing but get caught up in the idea it'd never be unique... I think enjoyable is good. And your stories are better than good. Please, more.
I had missed you.
There are a few authors on this site that stand out, and you are one of them. I' glad you are back, thank you.
Glad you're back
I don't find you work stale just entertaining. I've read through you repertoire from top to bottom and have hoped to see additions.
Thank you for the hard work and time. Please continue.
Woodmanone
ANOTHER GREAT STORY
glad to see you back.. sorry to hear bout you getting sick. I along with all your other fans have MISSED your GREAT writing....hope you finish some of your older stuff...such as LOOKIN FOR AN EDITOR and some others....although any story you write I enjoy...thanks for sharing your skills with this untalented slug...
Pretty well done,
but it lacked any pizzazz. He kept running into people he knew, everyone cheated and died, and life was total shit for most people. I prefer a little more of a plot. You've written some brilliant stories and have set your bar quite high. This is just average by your standards and pretty good by most others.
enjoyed your story as always 5 stars thanks
Good
Good story, good premise but the end was lame. Needs work.
Kudos on breaking the ice on your involuntary (due to health, certainly not lack of inherent creativity ) writer's block
The narrator was a survivor and a cool operator. The other characters were disposable and mere pawns to be sacrificed for the object lesson of the previous five hundred words. In real life , things would have been a bit more complex because when you're dabbling with a loose woman and she gets in the family way, the resulting baby can't be treated like a gopher in the County Whack-a-mole game.
Does this story rate with your best fictional output ? I'm taking the fifth on that. The BIG picture is that its a new year and its great to see you back in the game . Thank you for sharing and thank you even more for the Literotica`proof of life . I'm hoping for the best possible outcome in terms of your health concerns.
I'm looking forward for any stories to emerge from spare time left over from your current ' Take your Vitamins and Grind thru Rehab ' regime, but mainly want your health to rebound. If you hold up half as well as your stories do on multiple rereads, there is considerable cause for optimism.
Not Your Best
You have written some great stuff in the past, up with the best, but this falls way short.
It is crafted well enough so you haven't lost your technical skills. If I had to guess I would say you don't think much of the main character yourself, so why would we?
Reasonably good, but kinda convoluted.
Good to see you back.
Welcome Back!
You are one of my few "Favorite Authors", and it's great to have you back, hope you're wrong and you're health does improve.
On to the story -
First, I was sad that things didn't work out with Chris, I know it would have been kind of a "fairy tale" ending, but what can I say, I like happy endings.
Next, I was worried that you were going to have him get back with Sandy. I'm glad you didn't, and I am glad that you gave her some karmic relief!
Finally, I figured he was going to hook up with the seller, completely forgot about Gloria, very nice twist!
Excellent story!
Thanks for sharing.
Welcome back
While there are only a few variations of the themes we tend to read in this genre, your variations are always welcome.
Glad you're feeling better. Thanks for the tale.
WELCOME BACK
I have missed you terribly, your stories are always fun and have always have interesting plots and twists thereof.
Sorry about the health issues, getting old sucks, I have my own, we all do.
Still waiting for the novel!!!!! Let us know when and where.
Welcome back
Thanks for your offering. as always very moving and well written.
Original and entertaining
Worth 5* in my book.
Welcome back to a favorite author...
Thanks for the offering. Always enjoy reading your work. Your efforts are appreciated.
Welcome Back
It's good to read you back again. My only criticism is that some of the names connected to (temporary) partners got quite confusing. Be careful and proof read.
Tiny Tim
Sorry to hear about your hand, but very happy to see you back. Your stories have a certain ironic humor to them that appeals to me and I would absolutely like to read more of them. I can appreciate the problem with the fingers besides typing. A person I know lost the feeling in their thumb and index finger on the dominant hand. Life changing issue having to look at everything you want to pick up or put down.
Glad you are feeling better.
I enjoyed your story, look forward to your next one!
Hey wow!
I read your addendum. I'm sorry you've been hurt and I need to check through your romances to find the one you commented on.
Good loving wives stories this last year has been pretty thin; too much of the 'happy cuckold' for me. I've got several outlined, but I'm bogged down with work and writer's ennui.
HDK was sort of right about this one, but I'm inclined to think it's more about the need to actually pay attention to what you've written.
I'm going to demur regarding two items in your story. First, your story covered at least two decades, and you had our protagonist personally repairing an apartment complex roof. Unless someone is a 'full time' roofer; that's a pretty risky thing to do. I haven't been on a roof since my forties for precisely that reason. Second, you were uncertain about the value of Gloria's house and she had an Olympic sized pool? Jeepers; that's a lot of pool, even for a deceased dentist!
This was a hands down five. I hope you get better, and please keep writing.
Glad you're back
Excellent story.
Very good story...
Very good story...Well come back...
Good to have you back
And thanks for sharing your work.
Very fine work
I just never get tired of good stories. I admit that some people are never happy with anything and always want some thing new and different every day. Somehow that does not sound to me like a recipe for cultural survival.
One comment I would make on the story is that with many others on the site sort of leads to a certain lack of faith in the survival of couples(families) and the idea of the State raising our children is definitely unattractive. So this trait does not does not sound like a survival trait..
Interesting
I was entertained. What more can I ask from a story?
welcome back
I love all your stories glad to hear your writing again
Thank You
Not just for this story, but the entire body of your work. You are one of the best, if not on top of the mountain.
Nice job
and welcome back! Sorry to hear about your health woes, but glad to see you've come back out the other side. Cheers
Sorry to hear about your problems.
I've seen your handle in the hall of fame so I appraoched this with high expectations but found it a little dull. Hope your health continues to improve. 3*
Welcome back!
Definitely one of my favorite authors. Suggestion: Dragon Naturally Speaking. I write for a living (but not creatively) and hurt my wrist a couple of years back. One of my friends uses DNS because of RA. I tried it and it is great.
It is not perfect, but I can dictated and then edit far more quickly than I can type.
Glad your back!
I've read all of your stories and I know when I see your name I'm in for a good one. Happy to hear your back writing again and pray your health improves. Enjoyed this one just as much as the others keep up the good work and I look forward to your next endevor.
Sorry to hear about your health problems.wishing you. Well
You are one of the great one , writing stories. What ever sidelined you was tragic to you and us readers who love your work. Working with two fingers pretty much give s me an indication of what happened. I just hope you recover and are able to keep writing. A fan.
VERY GOOD!
I'm a new kid on the block and when I checked your bio, I almost just gave you a 5 and not bother with a comment. After all, what can I say that others have not said much more eloquently? Just this: you covered an awful lot of time and characters in just three pages. Maybe it was just this dumb old country boy, but I had trouble keeping up with your transitions. Since it didn't seem to bother anybody else, I must be wrong, but I'm just saying....
BTW, I know where you're coming from with the numbness problem. I woke up about thirty years ago with all fingers on left hand numb. Doc. says I lost the sensory nerves, but not the motor nerves. Over time the first two fingers got a little better, but I still have to look at the keys and had to resort to the old two finger typing method. It's tough, but you might learn to adjust--I have. Cheers from the other Carolina.
Glad your are back. Try Dragon it might be very helpful. Good story and pretty good for someone with 3 fingers that work. good luck
Very nice little story
Glad to see you submitting again. I've always enjoyed your work. This was a good short story. I wish there were more writers submitting this quality of work. Keep on with the hunting and pecking on the keyboard. It's much appreciated.
Confused
Maybe I missed something, but didn't Chris become Sandy?
Good Read
This is as always is a great story.
You brought the readers through the story, not knowing or expecting the ending it has.
I really enjoy your writing, keep it up.
Thanks
Also, since you have just posted this
wanted you to know that 500 Annies and The Hit List (Chapt 4) are some of the best pieces of fiction I have ever read. Thx for the entertainment. You must be a good sport to be around in person.
The author is one of favorites, but
this was not one of his better efforts. In fact, if this had been written by a lesser author, I would have stopped reading before the end of page 1. I'll pass more picky things directly to the author, but let me point out here what some of my bigger issues were: 1. There were too many wives, ex-wives, and hot dates mentioned on the first page. I cannot tell you how many of each Chill or Tony had. 2. The story did not always flow. Chill mentioned working overseas before he told us how and why he went to Saudi Arabia. 3. Way too many pronouns, especially considering the number of characters. At two points on page 2, I determined "he" = Tony. I looked back and found Tony's name last appeared four and six paragraphs earlier. 4. A number of characters appeared out of nowhere, and some were never mentioned again. Who was Ben?
LMAO!
I really enjoyed this one...even laughed out loud a couple of times. Glad to see you writing again, in my opinion, one of your stories with a recycled plot is better than a "new plot" by most others. Keep on writing!
Welcome back Q
Sorry to find out about your health problems; wishing you continued recovery. Great to have a Q story to read today! Thanks for writing. I liked the story.
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