SMILE!!!!!!
I liked the story but the characters lacked development, most people don't just fall into bed. Try building a relationship between the characters, and make the stories a little longer.
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SMILE!!!!!!
It's lacking something
I liked the story but the characters lacked development, most people don't just fall into bed. Try building a relationship between the characters, and make the stories a little longer.
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