All Comments on 'Diego's Learning Curve'

by eros1976

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Good beginning, but...

I loved the way you ended the story. Very intriguing final paragraph, and sure to have us waiting for the next installment. But remember that we're following your characters for the first time, and it was unrealistic that the women didn't offer him food, or show him to the bathroom, and that he had to wait a very long time to go potty. And there were a few too many typos.

redlion75redlion75about 10 years ago

didnt get the whole set up at all.put in the corner like an old umbrella,not able to move,or introduced to anyone.when dad went to take his shower was he fucking the daughter?if the mom wants him to runaway for his own safety then why not encourage him to take maggie?lastly where was the mafia connection? all we got here was a fucked up family led by what seems to be a fucked up father.

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