by KeithD
Although I believe advancing that quick to dp and massive dildos isn't possible. I've tried. Lol, this was a well written and brilliant fantasy tale. Keep writing. :-)
Not really my cup of tea this time around, not into pain. But your imagination and writing are phenomenal.
Both hot and a little frightening; well-written. Thank you very much for the story.
Liked it a lot until the last paragraph. It sounded as if E had some sinister plans for P,, which was pretty frightening. The thought of a Master turning on a servant/sub like that is really hard to believe. They’d been together years and there would be an enormous amount of trust built up between them.
Even if E was still angry with P for questioning his Master’s self control with Dale, an additional, more intense punishment (he’d already punished him twice) would be most likely, no? Hence the football players.
In the ending, If E had thought, “P’s going miss a lot of classes because P’s not going to be able to sit or walk for a month after I remind him of his place,” that would have made sense. (RIP P’s ass.) To shift to, “I’m done with Paul, he’s useless, will probably never see campus again and I’ll have no problem destroying his life” doesn’t make sense.
Besides Paul wanted to give Dale his fantasy, and was worried the fantasy would become a nightmare instead if any mistakes were made. He doesn’t deserve some terrible end for that. Do we think Dale would be okay with his friend disappearing for whatever reason?
The story was great, the ending just gave me anxiety and a sour taste in my mouth.
This was brutal with no redeeming qualities. Not even thought-provoking. And the ending sucked.