Overall, nice plot and story idea. However, there was an adequate amount of grammatical errors and the fact that it was narrorated by both characters was confusing at some times because of the errors. Nice idea, though!
thanks for the comment! I'll try act upon it :)
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Good story, some mistakes
Overall, nice plot and story idea. However, there was an adequate amount of grammatical errors and the fact that it was narrorated by both characters was confusing at some times because of the errors. Nice idea, though!
thanks for the comment! I'll try act upon it :)
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