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Stoopid!
A grown(?) woman can't buy the clothes she wants because her friend(?) won't let her?
Sub title wrong
When are writers to learn to use the language correctly.
If she is seduced by another man than her husband she is unfaithfull, simple as that.
Geez where have all the decent writers gone?
This was just terrible. She behaves like she has the brains of a 2 year old. Lacking any type of compelling writing, this was neither interesting or entertaining. A complete waste of time to read.
Angry people suck
People who comment on Literotica stories sure are an angry lot! What gives, guys? You're on a web site where amateur writers post dirty stories, which you read for free. Lighten up.
That said, this story didn't do much for me. The characters weren't very well fleshed-out, their actions and motivations weren't fully explained, and there wasn't any tension or drama to move the story forward. I encourage the author to keep writing, as it is the only way to improve. And by all means, ignore all the sad and bitter people who seem to get off on putting others down.
Cute
Not much was made of her prior effort to remain faithful to Hubby and/or her vows. This could have been simply her first opportunity to play 'tryst tango.' Was Hubby her 'first' and, then, only on their honeymoon - or did she play 'pull the train' a lot before marrying?
Pity she reacted so poorly to being royally pleasured. Did she have no idea about 'All's Fair ...'? She got buzzed before the club, latched onto the Hunk and partied seriously, then allowed herself to get compromised AND swept into the rack. "You're a Sneaky Fucker!" would have been a much more productive comment when he confessed his ruse (which he did NOT have to do!)
4*
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Not too bad. Just weak- consider what your competitors are writing. Well, here's to Part 2! Cheers!
Stupid shit
Y our old man, if you have one, may be a cockold fag but most of L.W. readers are not. Yuck.
What small percentage of husband really want to fuck up their marriages by having their wives fuck another
This story is pathetic , if you go outside of marriage , separate and get a divorce, but some people want there cake and eat it to. Plus support payments. And a comfortable life style they will not give up.
NOT BAD
The Anons were out in force. I'm not sure what they expect of you. It's true some comments were very constructive and I urge you to consider their advice. I did on my first venture into Loving Wives. Yes, the situations displayed were a bit unbelievable, but this is a SEX story designed to turn people on. It isn't meant to be on the New York Times best seller list. That said, you would improve if you flesh the characters out a bit. To do that, you need at least two pages, unless you are highly skilled. Try to be considerate of those who are most venomous, perhaps they have dealt with these situations, first hand. If so, I assure you our stories pour salt in wounds. Maybe I was overly lenient, or maybe just simple, but I loved the story. I gave you *****.
The majority of men
Have what is known as the male ego and, would not and more than likely could not share their wife. Unless it is under penalty of death or castration of the boyfriend/lover. Real men believe in fidelity. Although, I have seen some real life successful sister-wife marriages but, that goes in another direction; as women can "play second fiddle" a lot easier than men can.
Not Great Either
What Not Bad seems clueless about is that most men are actually turned off by the "my husband wants me to fuck other men" line. Why? Because it is a genuinely unreal position in real life & not a fantasy of many men.
To men with egos/pride:
As soon as you find out this is a cuckold/cheating wife story, close the webpage or go to another story which is more to your liking.
Complaining about a story which is clearly meant for enthusiasts and not for you, will make you look like complete idiots. The more vitriol you spew, the more you reveal about your own subconscious paraphilias. Humans tend to go out there way to despise things they don't understand or are ashamed of because of their latent fetishes.
That being said, this story only rated at 2* because it just wasn't captivating.
Too Bad
The story would have been a bit better if you had not added the last two paragraphs. If it had ended with her feeling anger and guilt, at least there would have been a little justice. As it is, you let her off the hook at the end.
"to men with egos and pride"???
there wasn't any kind of warning on this one that said the husband would become a willing cuckold until the very end and that ruined the story!!! everyone thinks there a fucking shrink
Don't ind the criticisms
I really loved the story, well, it can get more detailed, but that's just a detail. I wonder why people come here to read moralistic stories!
Keep up the good work!
Odd comments
Some of the feedback objects to the idea that the husband is turned on by his wife wanting to have sex with others. Not sure why they select these stories to read if the idea offends them. One even goes so far as to say most men are not turned on by this. I would never presume to speak for most men. I can say that my wife's affairs are a great turn on for me ... and for many of the reader's of my true stories.
Excellent story.
I truly enjoyed it. It was fun and very erotic. I rated it 5 stars.
Wonderful Three-Part Series!
All three of the stories in this series were smart, classy, well written, exciting and fun to read; both my wife and I enjoyed them tremendously.
It was interesting how the husband´s fantasy was actually fulfilled by the wife´s female friend who set her up for cheating. That is how my wife began being a hot wife and she has never slowed down since.
Please write another story in this series. We would love to see how the husband reacts when she tells him of her exploits!
Good job!
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