Really like this story, but Albert forgot one thing when it comes to hypnotizing someone, he must program the subject(victim) to respond ONLY to his voice saying the trigger word, not just anyone.
Looks like Albert may have to reprogram Mom and Sis to respond Only to his voice saying their trigger word and thus HE AND ONLY HE HAS CONTROL OVER THE 2 OF THEM!!!
After picking up from the first chapter, this chapter, while there *was* plot progression, felt like NOTHING WAS HAPPENING! I got to the end of the first page and it felt like only 10 seconds had passed since the end of the previous chapter. I get that her stripping slow was turning him on, but it felt like she was going at super-slow speed. More happened in the few paragraphs on page 2 than in the entirety of page 1
I'm not looking for the characters to wham-bang start fucking immediately. I normally hate those stories, I want the slow build, I like that. But this chapter just felt like watching paint dry, even though, as I said, there was plot progression. Here's hoping the next chapter is better.
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Oh wow
I really enjoyed that. Hope to see chapter four really soon!
bummer
I hate the way you stop just when it starts getting good .You are the writer so I guess I will just have to wait ....sucks though ....
One word and both sis and mom are his!!!
Really like this story, but Albert forgot one thing when it comes to hypnotizing someone, he must program the subject(victim) to respond ONLY to his voice saying the trigger word, not just anyone.
Looks like Albert may have to reprogram Mom and Sis to respond Only to his voice saying their trigger word and thus HE AND ONLY HE HAS CONTROL OVER THE 2 OF THEM!!!
Keep this story cumming!!!
Dragged for so long
After picking up from the first chapter, this chapter, while there *was* plot progression, felt like NOTHING WAS HAPPENING! I got to the end of the first page and it felt like only 10 seconds had passed since the end of the previous chapter. I get that her stripping slow was turning him on, but it felt like she was going at super-slow speed. More happened in the few paragraphs on page 2 than in the entirety of page 1
I'm not looking for the characters to wham-bang start fucking immediately. I normally hate those stories, I want the slow build, I like that. But this chapter just felt like watching paint dry, even though, as I said, there was plot progression. Here's hoping the next chapter is better.
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