Not so much into dominance/submission as mom/son fucking, this story was still super hot! Can't wait to read the next chapter when the nana is eating her daughter while the grandson fucks her from behind.
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Anonymous04/03/14
Crap! Written by a perverted "wanker"!!
Crap! Lewd Crap! Written by a perverted "WANKER!!!!"
Go back to playing with your putz as you fuck your own schmuck!!
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Anonymous04/03/14
liked it
I thought this was good. Has great possibilities, ignore the small-dick wanker who doesn't like your style. Lets see what chapter 2 has to offer .
MasterJohn: well, u have a live-in cock in your house...use it.
That's the wise advice Simon gives his mother in this excellent story, and it's advice every mother should heed. Face it, a woman in her late 30s or her 40s almost inevitably has unmet cuntal needs. Either hubby isn't in the picture any more or he's sadly falling down on the job for reasons of age or whatever. But Sara is a very lucky lady, she does indeed have a live-in cock in her house, her own boy's cock. From time to time Mom's seen Simon's meaty cock jumping around in his pants, and the sight makes her wet between her legs. Like every mother of a young son, Sara knows that her boy's got the hardest cock around, together with a pair of hot young balls that never quit. She knows that her son's a non-stop semen making machine and that he's got to unload his balls and shoot his semen all the time. Plus she's well aware that she herself has the perfect receptacle, the nature-given container, for all her boy's creamy sperm. It's the wonderful hole he came out of. Like plenty of boys, who knows probably most of them, Simon's been real interested in that hole, his own damn birth canal, the cunt he came out of. What's more natural than that the boy's big stiff prick comes together with his mother's warm wet twat, he pumps away at his mother's twat as she cums like crazy, and he finally blows his balls up inside dear old mom. Then he does it over and over again.
I am reading all the etries tosupport my fellow contestants.
This is not my type of category or story. Normally I am not a fan of incest stories, but this one was pretty hot. I really enjoyed the master/sub dynamic and the unintentional discovery that theyshared the same fetish was believably written. Good job.
I loved it, and would love to see grandma get in on the action.. I haven't read all your stories yet but I'm working on it.
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Anonymous04/03/14
so hotttttttttttttttttt
so fantastick....best story I"ve read in 10 yrs..is chapter 2 done yet?????
hurry please.
A
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Anonymous04/03/14
Damm this is an Excellentos Story
Goodness gracious....after reading the daily drivel that is offered up day in and day out on Latest Stories.....yours is a total breath of fresh air....not only do i hope you win the Earth Hour Contest....but may many more of your stories see the daily light of day on Literitica....20/10 from me......
Fucking loved it. Don't forget to read my email to you.
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Anonymous04/03/14
***
Listen, you are entitled to your subject matter and treat it any way you want, but do it accurately. You have the Oedipus Theory confused with the Greek tragedian, Sophocles's play, Oedipus The King, or Rex, the latin word for king. Oedipus, an orphan, is adopted and grows up to be a formidible political figure who kills a man in a power struggle of some kind, and it may have been competition for the man's wife whom he subsequently marries. So now he is married. He even becomes king. So far, so good. Just hard ball Athenian politics. But, aware he is an orphan, he decides to investigate his past, against the advice of the seer who advises him not to look too closely into it as he is likely to find out things that will be, shall we say, disturbing. He does it anyway and discovers the man he killed was his father and the woman he married was his mother. The information destroys him.
Using this, Freud came up with The Oedipus theory as a way of describing the psychological journey all boys take to adopt a masculine identity. The boy is proud of his penis, loves his mom, and fantasizes about taking his father's place. But fear that his father will discover his wishes and punish him by cutting off his penis produces intense anxiety in the boy which he resolves by adopting a sort of if-you-can't-beat-'em-join-em strategy and becomes like his father, thereby being able to enjoy his mother sort of vicariously and then later generalize it to a sexual orientation toward women generally.
Freud was an imaginative guy. But is there any reason to believe this stuff is actually true? Only his cadre of dedicated fellow religionists still take this stuff seriously. Others less taken with Freud's ideas have accused his theory of being the greatest intellectual hoax of the 20th century.
Freud was more or less addicted to cocaine and had lots of unsavory personal traits--extraordinary ambition being among them and a kind of ruthlessness. Some think he falsified some of the "evidence" he cited as the basis for his ideas.
You can come up with a better way to structure your story than to employ a confused fusion of the plot of a classical play and the use it was put to by an ambitious theorist.
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Anonymous04/03/14
Really!
"It didn't help that his mother, a teacher, was often walking around the house in a skirt and pantyhose"
Pressed the 'X' button and closed the window.
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Anonymous04/03/14
* * * * *
I don't usually like your stories, but this one was out-fucking-standing. Simon has his mom ready for "anything" and all he could come up with was to stick a phone in her pussy? It wasn't bad, but certainly not the first thing most of your readers would do. Anyway, keep up the good work!
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Anonymous04/03/14
Mechanics
Not my favorite subject matter, but a pretty decent story. Take care with grammar. Also, read up on writing in various POV's (point of view). You mixed them and that is generally a no-no in fiction writing. My first erotic fiction piece was ripped apart by an instructor for this 'head hopping' as they call it. If you write for fun, no big deal. If you want to be published, you might want to clean it up. Good job.
I only voted 5 on this, 'cause they don't have a 6!
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Anonymous04/04/14
greatfucking story don't stop now no runs in your stockings
your storyrocksfromanadmirer Tenbears43
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Anonymous04/04/14
great ;
Really looking to reading about how Mom eats Grans... Don't disappoint, please...
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Anonymous04/04/14
pissed off!!!!
Stories like this piss me off!! Realy bad!!
cause I can only score you a 5...and you need a 10!!!!!
fantastick work. Chapter 2 ready yet?
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Anonymous04/05/14
nice story
Nice concept and a good hard on story. I believe if Nana was like an antagonist then would have been better. Example, she just doubts from the conversation with Sara that she is being attracted towards Simon. Hence she comes their home to stay to avoid such possibility. But then how Simon Sara would somehow overcome it.
Just an idea, it might be stupid. :-)
Yeah, hot story and etc. I'm just a bit disappointed that author is incapable to write about love. All I can find is lust, domination, stockings (oh, well...) and a hellish mountain of fucking. It's entertaining to some point but sometimes I feel emptiness and sadness in these texts. The only story I could give a five was "Bedding The Babysitter" - the only piece where all mountain of lust and fucking was tied to some love.
But don't distract yourself with my laments :)
Oh, and please, don't use word SLUT for every slave in EVERY story of yours - it becomes really annoying. Find something new.
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Anonymous04/05/14
second rate
You have stopped respecting the rules of erotic fiction and now just post sex without story. This is very poor by your standards.
First,
Thanks to all who enjoyed the story...especially those who commented or voted.
Second
To those who leave negative comments. The last two I appreciate as they at least left potential constructive feedback...although I am quite unsure how I have stopped respecting the rules of erotic writing (if there is such a thing please let me know).
As for the love comment...I have written love stories and for the most part they are ignored.,.ie Serendipity. I have tried and succeeded with incest stories like A Sibling love Story and I think to a bigger extent the What Mom series. Oddly, I thought this story was a love story as both the mom and son got what they wanted from each other...although maybe that is just my view.
As for the word slut...I suppose that is true...bit is whore better? Tramp? What word would you like. I believe we all have our inner slut that we would like brought out more often.
On top of that, my stories are fantasy...many times things I wished I did...things I wished I would be brazen enough to do...do I want to be called a slut all the time? No! Yet, in the heat of the moment, in the moment of submission, it is a trigger to pleasure. It is who I am and I will not apologize for it.
All that said, info appreciate the comments, including those that are constructive like the last two, not so much like one of the first generic ones.
Again, thanks to all who read my material, comment, vote and email me.
I write first for me, but secondly to the many readers who enjoy my writing.
I really don't want lecture you about what you should write or not. Every author should write only things he or she likes the most. I only stated my observations - almost every last piece of yours has your usual "menu" - lust, kinks, control, some sort of sex game and this combo is pretty successful. But only to a certain point. Beyond that point the "usual" menu is not enough. So I simply analyzed your works and decided, that they lacking of some heartwarming relationship between main characters.
You show a master-slave relationship a lot, but those are all the same - cold, calculated, aggressive, abusive (just like you like them the most, I guess).
I mentioned "Bedding The Babysitter" because the SM in that story has different structure. It's warm, somehow fulfilling, less abusive but still aggressive. Or perhaps I should say it's still very abusive, but the reader is happy about that because of warm relationships between characters.
You said you wrote a love stories and mentioned "What Mom" series (which I read TWICE). Those series are your "usual" - kinks+lust+sexgames. It's not a love story, sorry.
I could analyze a whole series and write a more accurate comment about why it's not a love story, just not in this comment and only if you are really interested. I personally like your works, most of them just like they are now. Just sometimes I think they really could be much better.
Oh, and for a "slut" thingie... Well, I can't really suggest alternatives here. I'm your reader - I wanna be amused :) All I can do is analyze and tell what effects your works has on me. Everything else is for you to research.
So, good luck.
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Anonymous04/06/14
Just happy that there is no daughter doming the mom this time!
Always like to read your stories.
You create a believable word picture.
Its just that I would like for you to give us more moms seduced by the sons rather than daughters.
Not saying that mom/daughter stories are not hot,
Its just that they are now getting to be a bigger part of your work than almost every thing else.
Hi Jasmine.
I love authors who actually take the time to read their feedback and comment on such. Thank you for that. That being said, can you tell your readers if you have a sequel planned for this story and, if so, is it almost ready to be published?
Thanks all who read and supported this story. I usually don't start a sequel until I know there is enough interest in one. As a writer I have many times been surprised that a story I thought would be huge wasn't (serendipity),and then conversely surprised when a story catches fire (like catching mommy).
I do plan a sequel but it may be a while as I finish a couple other sequels, write new stories and future contest stories.
Oh fuck, this was so hot. I love stories where a mother slowly becomes a slut for her son. Especially when mixed with fetishes and dirty talk like this. The whole thing in the end with grandmother listening in was the cherry on the cake. A perfect five story.
I also love the idea of a 'Nana-slut', a 'Nana-pet', a 'Nana-slave', and can't wait for part two if you decide to write it. I would love to read a scene where Sara and nana give Simon a loving blowjob together.
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Anonymous04/17/14
Fantastic!
Sincerely hope there will be a part two. That would be
totally awesome.
Loved this story. From a male point of view: all my teenage fantasies come to life in one story. I'm with so many others hoping for a quick chapter 2, so please put your other sequels on hold and give us more. Soon. ASAP. Wish I was your master so I could order you to do it. LOL!
Your writing is simply great and extremely stimulating. This story really set the mark for future writing, and you left off with a tease knowing that your fan club would write requesting many more chapters concerning the Mom, Son and Nana. I'm sure you will write it in a very stimulating manner including the seed planted at the end of this story. Wow, great and you should get a reward.
Keep the stories coming, all are simply great!!!!
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Anonymous05/10/14
Great story
This could turn into a book. Very horny, had an erection and waiting for the next chapter. Well done!
English
Not so much into dominance/submission as mom/son fucking, this story was still super hot! Can't wait to read the next chapter when the nana is eating her daughter while the grandson fucks her from behind.
Crap! Written by a perverted "wanker"!!
Crap! Lewd Crap! Written by a perverted "WANKER!!!!"
Go back to playing with your putz as you fuck your own schmuck!!
liked it
I thought this was good. Has great possibilities, ignore the small-dick wanker who doesn't like your style. Lets see what chapter 2 has to offer .
hilarious!
Great humor! Loved the style.
MasterJohn: well, u have a live-in cock in your house...use it.
That's the wise advice Simon gives his mother in this excellent story, and it's advice every mother should heed. Face it, a woman in her late 30s or her 40s almost inevitably has unmet cuntal needs. Either hubby isn't in the picture any more or he's sadly falling down on the job for reasons of age or whatever. But Sara is a very lucky lady, she does indeed have a live-in cock in her house, her own boy's cock. From time to time Mom's seen Simon's meaty cock jumping around in his pants, and the sight makes her wet between her legs. Like every mother of a young son, Sara knows that her boy's got the hardest cock around, together with a pair of hot young balls that never quit. She knows that her son's a non-stop semen making machine and that he's got to unload his balls and shoot his semen all the time. Plus she's well aware that she herself has the perfect receptacle, the nature-given container, for all her boy's creamy sperm. It's the wonderful hole he came out of. Like plenty of boys, who knows probably most of them, Simon's been real interested in that hole, his own damn birth canal, the cunt he came out of. What's more natural than that the boy's big stiff prick comes together with his mother's warm wet twat, he pumps away at his mother's twat as she cums like crazy, and he finally blows his balls up inside dear old mom. Then he does it over and over again.
good luck in the contest
I am reading all the etries tosupport my fellow contestants.
This is not my type of category or story. Normally I am not a fan of incest stories, but this one was pretty hot. I really enjoyed the master/sub dynamic and the unintentional discovery that theyshared the same fetish was believably written. Good job.
Excellent
I hope there is a chapter two very soon. In my opinion you already won.
Is there a sequel coming?
I loved it, and would love to see grandma get in on the action.. I haven't read all your stories yet but I'm working on it.
so hotttttttttttttttttt
so fantastick....best story I"ve read in 10 yrs..is chapter 2 done yet?????
hurry please.
A
Damm this is an Excellentos Story
Goodness gracious....after reading the daily drivel that is offered up day in and day out on Latest Stories.....yours is a total breath of fresh air....not only do i hope you win the Earth Hour Contest....but may many more of your stories see the daily light of day on Literitica....20/10 from me......
Superb story
Fucking loved it. Don't forget to read my email to you.
***
Listen, you are entitled to your subject matter and treat it any way you want, but do it accurately. You have the Oedipus Theory confused with the Greek tragedian, Sophocles's play, Oedipus The King, or Rex, the latin word for king. Oedipus, an orphan, is adopted and grows up to be a formidible political figure who kills a man in a power struggle of some kind, and it may have been competition for the man's wife whom he subsequently marries. So now he is married. He even becomes king. So far, so good. Just hard ball Athenian politics. But, aware he is an orphan, he decides to investigate his past, against the advice of the seer who advises him not to look too closely into it as he is likely to find out things that will be, shall we say, disturbing. He does it anyway and discovers the man he killed was his father and the woman he married was his mother. The information destroys him.
Using this, Freud came up with The Oedipus theory as a way of describing the psychological journey all boys take to adopt a masculine identity. The boy is proud of his penis, loves his mom, and fantasizes about taking his father's place. But fear that his father will discover his wishes and punish him by cutting off his penis produces intense anxiety in the boy which he resolves by adopting a sort of if-you-can't-beat-'em-join-em strategy and becomes like his father, thereby being able to enjoy his mother sort of vicariously and then later generalize it to a sexual orientation toward women generally.
Freud was an imaginative guy. But is there any reason to believe this stuff is actually true? Only his cadre of dedicated fellow religionists still take this stuff seriously. Others less taken with Freud's ideas have accused his theory of being the greatest intellectual hoax of the 20th century.
Freud was more or less addicted to cocaine and had lots of unsavory personal traits--extraordinary ambition being among them and a kind of ruthlessness. Some think he falsified some of the "evidence" he cited as the basis for his ideas.
You can come up with a better way to structure your story than to employ a confused fusion of the plot of a classical play and the use it was put to by an ambitious theorist.
Really!
"It didn't help that his mother, a teacher, was often walking around the house in a skirt and pantyhose"
Pressed the 'X' button and closed the window.
* * * * *
I don't usually like your stories, but this one was out-fucking-standing. Simon has his mom ready for "anything" and all he could come up with was to stick a phone in her pussy? It wasn't bad, but certainly not the first thing most of your readers would do. Anyway, keep up the good work!
Mechanics
Not my favorite subject matter, but a pretty decent story. Take care with grammar. Also, read up on writing in various POV's (point of view). You mixed them and that is generally a no-no in fiction writing. My first erotic fiction piece was ripped apart by an instructor for this 'head hopping' as they call it. If you write for fun, no big deal. If you want to be published, you might want to clean it up. Good job.
LOVED IT! 100%
I too would love to see this story continued. Good luck in the contest!
thanx
This is the best story I have read on here and the only one I have rated or commented on so yes plz continue the story.
Only one word to say about this - Excellent!
only thing I didn't like,
it ended too soon. There just has to be a part two for nana-slut. and I see that you've seen this before but I have to say....great story!
Amazing
I want to read the next chapter!!! Keep it coming! No pun intended:)
work
Can you have the son help his mom with her female students
Wow
I only voted 5 on this, 'cause they don't have a 6!
greatfucking story don't stop now no runs in your stockings
your storyrocksfromanadmirer Tenbears43
great ;
Really looking to reading about how Mom eats Grans... Don't disappoint, please...
pissed off!!!!
Stories like this piss me off!! Realy bad!!
cause I can only score you a 5...and you need a 10!!!!!
fantastick work. Chapter 2 ready yet?
nice story
Nice concept and a good hard on story. I believe if Nana was like an antagonist then would have been better. Example, she just doubts from the conversation with Sara that she is being attracted towards Simon. Hence she comes their home to stay to avoid such possibility. But then how Simon Sara would somehow overcome it.
Just an idea, it might be stupid. :-)
HOT...HOT...EVEN HOTTER!
HOT story....so waiting for the next installment!
Yeah, hot story and etc. I'm just a bit disappointed that author is incapable to write about love. All I can find is lust, domination, stockings (oh, well...) and a hellish mountain of fucking. It's entertaining to some point but sometimes I feel emptiness and sadness in these texts. The only story I could give a five was "Bedding The Babysitter" - the only piece where all mountain of lust and fucking was tied to some love.
But don't distract yourself with my laments :)
Oh, and please, don't use word SLUT for every slave in EVERY story of yours - it becomes really annoying. Find something new.
second rate
You have stopped respecting the rules of erotic fiction and now just post sex without story. This is very poor by your standards.
Author's note
First,
Thanks to all who enjoyed the story...especially those who commented or voted.
Second
To those who leave negative comments. The last two I appreciate as they at least left potential constructive feedback...although I am quite unsure how I have stopped respecting the rules of erotic writing (if there is such a thing please let me know).
As for the love comment...I have written love stories and for the most part they are ignored.,.ie Serendipity. I have tried and succeeded with incest stories like A Sibling love Story and I think to a bigger extent the What Mom series. Oddly, I thought this story was a love story as both the mom and son got what they wanted from each other...although maybe that is just my view.
As for the word slut...I suppose that is true...bit is whore better? Tramp? What word would you like. I believe we all have our inner slut that we would like brought out more often.
On top of that, my stories are fantasy...many times things I wished I did...things I wished I would be brazen enough to do...do I want to be called a slut all the time? No! Yet, in the heat of the moment, in the moment of submission, it is a trigger to pleasure. It is who I am and I will not apologize for it.
All that said, info appreciate the comments, including those that are constructive like the last two, not so much like one of the first generic ones.
Again, thanks to all who read my material, comment, vote and email me.
I write first for me, but secondly to the many readers who enjoy my writing.
Jasmine April, 2014
I really don't want lecture you about what you should write or not. Every author should write only things he or she likes the most. I only stated my observations - almost every last piece of yours has your usual "menu" - lust, kinks, control, some sort of sex game and this combo is pretty successful. But only to a certain point. Beyond that point the "usual" menu is not enough. So I simply analyzed your works and decided, that they lacking of some heartwarming relationship between main characters.
You show a master-slave relationship a lot, but those are all the same - cold, calculated, aggressive, abusive (just like you like them the most, I guess).
I mentioned "Bedding The Babysitter" because the SM in that story has different structure. It's warm, somehow fulfilling, less abusive but still aggressive. Or perhaps I should say it's still very abusive, but the reader is happy about that because of warm relationships between characters.
You said you wrote a love stories and mentioned "What Mom" series (which I read TWICE). Those series are your "usual" - kinks+lust+sexgames. It's not a love story, sorry.
I could analyze a whole series and write a more accurate comment about why it's not a love story, just not in this comment and only if you are really interested. I personally like your works, most of them just like they are now. Just sometimes I think they really could be much better.
Oh, and for a "slut" thingie... Well, I can't really suggest alternatives here. I'm your reader - I wanna be amused :) All I can do is analyze and tell what effects your works has on me. Everything else is for you to research.
So, good luck.
Just happy that there is no daughter doming the mom this time!
Always like to read your stories.
You create a believable word picture.
Its just that I would like for you to give us more moms seduced by the sons rather than daughters.
Not saying that mom/daughter stories are not hot,
Its just that they are now getting to be a bigger part of your work than almost every thing else.
Freud would have loved this story
Yep--he'd have said it proved he was right, after all.
Damned good story, even though Simon cheated by looking up his mother's internet history.
Good luck in the Earth Day contest.
All's fair in love, war, and sex
He may have cheated, but, anything goes. Loved the story.
great submission
Love your stories this should totally get a sequel you're very talented
Here's to many more great stories,
That1guy ;)
Great!
Another home run from one of the most talented authors here.
Hi Jasmine.
I love authors who actually take the time to read their feedback and comment on such. Thank you for that. That being said, can you tell your readers if you have a sequel planned for this story and, if so, is it almost ready to be published?
Authors note 2
Thanks all who read and supported this story. I usually don't start a sequel until I know there is enough interest in one. As a writer I have many times been surprised that a story I thought would be huge wasn't (serendipity),and then conversely surprised when a story catches fire (like catching mommy).
I do plan a sequel but it may be a while as I finish a couple other sequels, write new stories and future contest stories.
Jasmine April 2014
Wonderfully dirty
Oh fuck, this was so hot. I love stories where a mother slowly becomes a slut for her son. Especially when mixed with fetishes and dirty talk like this. The whole thing in the end with grandmother listening in was the cherry on the cake. A perfect five story.
Request for part two
I also love the idea of a 'Nana-slut', a 'Nana-pet', a 'Nana-slave', and can't wait for part two if you decide to write it. I would love to read a scene where Sara and nana give Simon a loving blowjob together.
Fantastic!
Sincerely hope there will be a part two. That would be
totally awesome.
NICE! (but naughty)
I also hope you add a sequel. I enjoyed your unique lead in to the actual incest. Thank you for the excellent story.
WHEE !!!!! You have done it again.
Loved this story. The sexual talk on the computer. The ringing phone while secreted.
Nana coming to play, oh happy day !
Thanks Don
Please
Loved this story. From a male point of view: all my teenage fantasies come to life in one story. I'm with so many others hoping for a quick chapter 2, so please put your other sequels on hold and give us more. Soon. ASAP. Wish I was your master so I could order you to do it. LOL!
nana slut
Oh you have to add 7 or 8 chapters to this one it is too good to stop now!!! Well done
Awesome story
You have to write a second part to this one.
Keep it up!!
Un-f'in-believable!
Incredible story! I want MORE!
grandma next?
I hope that you write the follow up
Another Great Story
Your writing is simply great and extremely stimulating. This story really set the mark for future writing, and you left off with a tease knowing that your fan club would write requesting many more chapters concerning the Mom, Son and Nana. I'm sure you will write it in a very stimulating manner including the seed planted at the end of this story. Wow, great and you should get a reward.
Keep the stories coming, all are simply great!!!!
Great story
This could turn into a book. Very horny, had an erection and waiting for the next chapter. Well done!
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