Tales From Subspace

Hot

Well, I've never been one to read it watch things like this, but when I first started reading this I was hopelessly hooked. What does this mean for me? Am I part of this, in liking BDSM, I've never tried it so maybe I will never know. The thought of this slightly scares me, and I'm very confuses as to whether this is a part of me, or whether I just got caught up in the erotic writing! Anyway, what an amazing story, thankyou for writing it and sharing it. While I still try to figure out if this means somethig for me.....

Amazing.

I'm not even into BDSM except very, very peripherally, and it grabbed my attention and kept it held in a rigid grip until the end. Excellent, amazing story. Fantastic!

Wonderful work, would benefit from copy edit

You've done wonderfully with narrative and character development. The biggest improvement would come from getting the articles right: to vs. too, etc.

Creative

I really enjoyed the development and the plot -- you are very creative and an excellent BDSM storyteller. I agree that the article confusion and other grammatical problems like misplaced punctuation take away from the story. It would benefit from copyediting.

Loved it.

Better than some of the BDSM books I've read.

Good story

The misplaced punctuation is disturbing but it's a really good story. I enjoyed it!

Thank you

I am very new to BDSM and have many questions. I have an online Master who loves explaining things. I have to say that your story answered many questions I had...and opened up a lot more! I absolutely loved this. It took me two weeks or more to read it, because it is so intense. My head began to spin if I tried to take in too much at one time. You write about things I never even thought of as being erotic and you take some of my taboo areas and make me crave them. Incredible. Yes, it needs a good editor and some cleaning up, but it packs an incredibly powerful emotional punch. I just finished it and I'm drained.

Thank you. Thank you so very much.

I did not enjoy this at all. I found the experiences crossed the line one too many times, I don't think it's sexy to have someones boundaries purposely crossed in the way they were in this story. It seems rather abusive and disresperctful. That could be overlooked as part of the writer's fantasy if it weren't for the repetitive psycho-babbly that is the theme of the story.
The technical aspect of the story was disappointing. Repetitive descriptive style and poor grammar show a lack of editing.
I read the entire thing and it's the first time I've ever been turned off by bdsm.

Turned me on more than once, and scared me even more!

OMG what a reading experience....Got me going at around the 6th page, to the point, I not only did not feel alone, but also felt a build up, needing to be released...sub.l.

This is one of the best stories I've read on here regarding emotional depth and complexity. You have put SO MUCH depth into your characters, particularly Anne, it reads as an autobiography. I have no idea if it is, but just the level you are willing to go to to delve into her psyche, motivation, experience, reaction .... really incredible.

The ONLY material criticism in terms of writing: the entire story is told from Anne's point of view until page 22, when we mysteriously dip into Adam's head a few times before the end. This is jarring for the reader, and doesn't add to the experience of the story. I would encourage removing them and finding some other way to communicate Adam from Anne's perspective.

Great writing, Rene!

First comment ever, just for you.

...Oh, my god. This story.. I don't even know how to put into words what it made me think and feel. I think I took the most time of anybody who's commented yet to read it, 5 and a half days, after work and in the morning. Is there a favorite option if I sign up? Because this is the best story I've ever read on here, as well as the longest I've ever actually finished. I've been curious about BDSM since I was 14, but have never really experienced it or read a really good story explaining the relationship between masters, slaves and trainers. This story did all that, and more. I feel like my interest in this side of life isn't so strange anymore, and I'd love to explore it more.. Maybe not as full out as Anne did, some sections were just plain frightening, or disturbing. Others, though, brought me to tears with their deep emotions and realizations. Loved this.

Amazing. Really.

I just finished and I can't wait to read it again. Thank you.

Good but needs editing

I really enjoyed the story itself but the format need some fixing. The misplaced commas and periods made it a lot harder to read, and mistakes in the writing always bother me, no matter how small. Great story, the author just needs to learn some more rules.

amazing!

beautiful story, just finished, had me riveted from beginning to end!!! and wondering where we can find places like that in my area!

Great story!

This story had so many layers. I really enjoyed reading it and being in the heads of the characters. You have so much talent, Nightqueen1963!

Thank you

Beyond a small need for some basic editing -something that can for sure slip through the cracks when a work is as long as this-, I thought this story was absolutely fantastic. I venture here for the written sex, but I love it when I find a story that goes beyond offering insight and has content that truly causes me to explore myself. There were several parts and lines that did this for me (I love Adam)... One of my all time favorite quotes, attributed to Oscar Wilde, says that "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." I recognized this while I was reading, that there were lines and insights that perhaps have been leaked into your mind by someone else, but you were able to assimilate them so well into a complete story that it became a revealing experience for myself, personally. Thank you for posting this. :)

Nice!

Wow, well written! There were moments where it was like reading things pulled out of my own head styalistcally speaking. Weirdness. The internet makes it so much easier to find your evil twin. XD

Very well written!

This is probably the best story I've read on this site thus far! It covered such a wide array of BDSM. I loved every word of it! Thank you for sharing such a well written piece!

Hmmmmm

I don't know if I live on a different planet or something but, for me, this was not a "wow!" story. There were elements of interest but stylistically and technically, it was like something a merely averagely literate 15 year old could have written. And a third too long, which is a common fault, yet still reading as if chunks of narrative had gone missing or an earlier draft of a story had been partially rewritten.

Perfect!

I loved this story, I read it slowly and enjoyed every word. I would love to belong to a Jon or Traci.

WOW

I have read many stories on this site, but this one is probably the best one I have read to date, it really caught me up into the tale, and the visuals provided made me feel like I was really there!!!! Super good read!!!!

Enjoyed this read, enjoying this site

Like others I'm sure, I found my way here looking for something better than what the summer's popular BDSM bestsellers (available at Costco, forgodsake) offered.
I loved the education this story offered and am looking forward to reading others. Great to find this site and realize how much it has to offer.

overrated

I can't understand people who praise the writing here. It's terrible. Misspellings. Horrible sentence structure, most of the time. Wrong words used often ("to" vs. "too" and other confusions).

Many people have praised this story because it seems to say for them what they cannot say for themselves. I respect that. But this is not good writing.

Jane in Los Altos

Not Worth It

I had trouble getting into this story. Just as it would grab my attention, I would be distracted by the horrible grammar and spelling errors. It was also incredibly long and not in a good way.

I find this particular story to be so very close to what many of us experience. While the beginning of the story had hiccups, I found that the journey Anne took to get to the place is peace is the most important. I would encourage those who can only see errors and lengthy introductions to re-read this. Not skip words, paragraphs, sections or pages. I encourage you to see the rawness of what lies on these pages.

The story line itself was very captivating, but the grammar and spelling definitly needs work. It was distracting having to reread a sentence because of sentence structure. I like the way you write, so keep working on it. Be sure to have an editor go over your story more than once next time around. Thank you.

Solid 3

I loved this story and rather enjoyed the writing style. I felt that this journey was real almost from the very first paragraph. However, the grammar, usage, and mechanics errors really downgraded the quality. Why waste time on such a beautiful plot if you're going to muck it up with such easily-avoided mistakes? Not to mention, near the end, the story telling began to feel rushed and like there was less effort put into it. The ending felt bad and like a total cop-out. Anne's final thoughts seemed less intelligent and philosophical than all her earlier ones. It felt weak and out of character to me. But this story still moved me and even turned me on a few times. That's why I say you get a solid 3/5. Keep it up and I hope to read more amazing works from you in the future.

great story

I enjoyed reading this story a lot. It's the first one I read about bdsm, and I think it was a great introduction to that world, and it was great that so many things were explained about it. While I did notice the spelling and grammar mistakes, I did not feel that they detracted from the story. If anything, they added character, as if Anne was just writing in her journal.

Absolutely the finest

Hands down my very favorite story here at Literotica, thus far. And I have read my share. Thank you for sharing it. ;-) I have never experienced quite an array of emotions from a story.

Breath taking.

For one such as I who is not of the BDSM world, I found this story truly riveting. I felt wholly the emotional ups and downs. I understood the struggle that Annie went through in finding and accepting herself and a place to be who and what she truly is.
Grammatical errors aside, it was an eyeopening story. Long as it was, I could not stop until I learned how it all played out.
Thank you for sharing.

IDB.

Eh

The overall grammar and writing style is fairly decent, however, as a submissive, not a slave, I was kinda repulsed with about 90% of what Anne put up with...my vote is based on that, not any of the spelling or grammar mistakes the author might have made.

Great piece of erotica

Clean up the typo's, fill in the ending a bit, then try to get it published... YES, in my humble opinion it's that good! Truly an exciting story... keep up the great work, you have a wonderful imagination (or have lived through some wonderful experiences).
Sure hope to read more of you work in the near future!!!

Amazing!

I have never had a story make me feel like this one did. I loved how it wraped me up and made me forget my life. Thank you for writing it.

Awesome Story

I have never felt such a gamut of emotion from a piece of erotica. Amazing story full of so much more than just a good lay. Fantastic storyline and well defined characters.
I would love to volunteer to help with editing and minor suggestions. I couldn't quite give it 5 stars but only because of the grammar and misspellings. Otherwise it was one of the best here or anywhere. Please keep writing, I'm very interested to know more.

Awesome.

Forced orgasms for several chapters.

You have some great ideas for your story. But spend some time trying to improve your writing style. It seemed a little unfocused and sloppy, and that hid the great core that your story has.

Brilliant!

It's been a long time since I've read a story as good as this one, let alone it took a while to read as well (always appreciated). You really need to work on becoming a professional writer. I'd definitely buy your book in a heartbeat.

Please keep writing, I'd love to read more of your stuff.

Mixed emotions

This story is positively inspirational. And negatively inspirational. I liked it and I hated it. I want to rewrite it. In some form, I almost certainly will.

I realize from the comments that this story was posted a decade ago and heaven only knows if the author pays any attention to new comments on it. PLEASE may I edit it? You have some wonderful lines, some great description, some really awesome and clever phrases... and the most pathetic, simple, sixth-grade writing mistakes. I'm appalled by the many comments praising this story as being well written. It isn't. The constant sentence fragments alone drove me nuts.

Writing aside, I'm also disturbed by the number of comments from people who think they are being "educated" about BDSM from this story. I have an entirely different experience of the BDSM community than the one described. I'm not sure I believe that places like Jon and Traci's house exist. The idea that a submissive should be trained to one "correct" way of behaving is absurd. My Master has no interest in me behaving anything like that. Other Doms I've been with have had different things they wanted. NONE of them have expected 98% of the "slave training" nonsense, and what any one wants is a completely individual thing. It's like deciding that women should have "wife training." How can you train someone to be the wife of a husband that doesn't yet exist? The Dom/me-sub relationship is a relationship. Its between two (or more) individuals. There are no general rules, just ideas to talk about. There are no "standards." There are no rituals that all subs or slaves need to learn, no training that can be generalized.

Most disturbing of all is the repeated crossing of the line from BDSM (which is consensual even in consensual non-consent) to RAPE. In real BDSM, the idea of discussing hard limits is so that they are NOT included in play, not so that the Doms can abuse them all as quickly as possible. Why would anyone expose their true hard limits if the purpose was to tell the Dom the things you refuse to have done to you so they could go ahead and do them? WTF? Genuine rape, nonconsensual sex acts, as an "initiation," as a practical joke "gift" at a bachelor's party, as part of "slave training" is horrifying. It is what gives BDSM the bad reputation that Anne is fighting through the whole story. In the same vein, the abuse of the idea of the safeword is disgusting.

This story has so much potential, Anne's journey is so important for people to understand, that it is frustrating as hell to have the story fuck itself in its own ass.

Amazing

I loved this story, I was able to relate to it in so many different ways, Thank you for this.

exquisite

Your novel is amazing. I have read this story 4 times and I am an avid reader. You put this novel together so very well. It makes me so happy and I get butterflies every time I read it. I'm so happy you decided to keep going with it. Please continue writing, you are a very good author in my book.

Interesting...

I find the erotic details very pleasurable. Your descriptive development of characters was great, and the finite details of the events made me wet. I do however agree that some lines were crossed as far as the true meaning of a D/s relationship. Hard limits agree there for a reason. The first time I read it I didn't catch all the grammar mistakes, but the 2nd, 3rd and 4th times I did. This story could be really outstanding with proper editing and a little direction...wow, would blow it out of the water.

I love Anne and Adam..would love to see their story develop more. Great job!

Absolutely amazing! I hope to stumble upon Jon and Traci's place one day, haha.

Wow. Breathtaking!

This is an exceptionally well put together novel. So well written it gave me goosebumps.. Tactful writing alongside an incredibly erotic storyline stopped this being tacky. So well put together, please do carry on writing!!!