I was a little bored at the beginning and I felt like it was going to be a cliched erotic story, but your extensive vocabulary and descriptions kept me reading. It was a complete turn around when I got to the encounter and I was glad I kept reading. Great short story and like another person commented, your talent for this is amazing.
My favorite parts though had to be your descriptions and your extensive vocabulary.
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Good First Outing
Well done, good lead up, good development, great story flow. You've the talent to create some good erotica.
Wow!
I was a little bored at the beginning and I felt like it was going to be a cliched erotic story, but your extensive vocabulary and descriptions kept me reading. It was a complete turn around when I got to the encounter and I was glad I kept reading. Great short story and like another person commented, your talent for this is amazing.
My favorite parts though had to be your descriptions and your extensive vocabulary.
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