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by Anonymous04/06/14

Needs a little more world building

You jump from I am this, to I woke up, to I am getting laid. Orgasm doesn't have to be the end of a chapter.

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by OntheMoon04/06/14

I will take that into account for part 2. I'll try to make it more in depth in later stories.

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