You need someone, not yourself, to proofread your work and to advise on things like grammar, construction and spelling. The grammar and spelling errors are distracting, but otherwise the story held up well.
The girl asking for anal came as a surprise and the vibrator was another. Nice story.
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You need someone, not yourself, to proofread your work and to advise on things like grammar, construction and spelling. The grammar and spelling errors are distracting, but otherwise the story held up well.
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The girl asking for anal came as a surprise and the vibrator was another. Nice story.
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