Very erotic - I wish it had been longer!
Work on your grammer, especially punctuation (commas), and proofreading. This is a story that definitely shows promise.
Can't wait to hear more of your story and does Momma find out. do any of the girls get jealous.
Nice start; please break up the long paragraphs.
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Wow, great start
Very erotic - I wish it had been longer!
Shows promise.
Work on your grammer, especially punctuation (commas), and proofreading. This is a story that definitely shows promise.
Great Start
Can't wait to hear more of your story and does Momma find out. do any of the girls get jealous.
Nice start; please break up the long paragraphs.
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Back to Cuban Incest 01 or
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