A Simple Round of Golf

Poly

Yuck

Writing is very juvenile.

Well, I waded through the entire story, although it took two sessions. You put a lot of work into the story and I thought it was pretty good through the first seven or eight chapters, but then it kind of bogged down into an idealistic polyamorous fantasy. It seemed particularly unlikely that the parents would just accept the living arrangements like they were portrayed. The other unrealistic issue is the numerous children born to supposedly unwed mothers. The situation is certainly common enough, but the close living arrangements in a small town would give rise to lots of talk and speculation and then there is the issue of birth certificates.

hmmm

Sort of saw the ending coming.

Parts were to far out there though. I mean, she knows she will be proposed to, and accept, yet plans a "date" for the next day?

And really, there just are not that many bi females out there, this story had virtually of them bi.

and she seemed to jealous most of the story to suddenly give free access to her husband, and suddenly seem to almost prefer girls to him.

And even with the other girls, I cant see the guy not getting concerned about her drifting into being bi, and again almost seeming to want it more then him at times.

great writing, and over all liked the story, but to many suspension of disbelief points.

most of it liked but when gloria turned pam into a submissive whore for her friends,and her sisters didnt think that was a bad thing so much for looking out for your sister.then mel lied to them in order to get a baby then become a part of the family.

Very good start but it got stupid at the end.

I liked the first half of the story but second half got stupid. It seemed like the author was trying to hard towards the end and let the story get away from them. By the end it seemed like everyone was a basket case with over active libidos, this really took the shine off some nice characters.
Lonewolf2013

Good story

A very nicely explained poly story. My only issue was the sorority sister thing for the male.

loved the starting ..... but not much can be said about the rest

a colossal waste of time

The start was about a rather nonsocial college student who had some fairly well developed golf skills. He became superman, or is that polyman?
There we so many missing words, grammatical errors, and just plain mistakes it was hard to slog through the entire saga.
for example, if he proposed at midnight, as the ball fell, on New Year's eve, why did they have class the next afternoon? I could go on and on, but then I would be just like the 23 page story.

Bizarre

This story started out very good and just went down hill. The author in all most all of his stories has demonstrated that he seems to be fixated on, and fantizes about Bi sexual women. He sort of went overboard in this story.
George in Omaha

Excellent but flawed

I love this story. Yes it is long. Yes it has flaws, the biggest IMHO is the sex scenes that are glossed over, especially Rick & Susan's first time. Try breaking into smaller chapters and maybe so much wouldn't wind up on the cutting room floor.

grammar

Great 5 * story. Constructive criticism: You usually had quotes around it so it is the way people talk, but it really should be "Give it to Mary and me" (not Mary and I), and
just think: Give it to (me),[and Mary]. And as others said, way too many women and you and " I". were not in sororities, but I couldn' t believe sister-male. (Again," I "was not in one [think singular]. from the 83 -year-old fuss- budgiot(sp?),JD

The story

For starters all in all i liked it,wether it belongs in ROMANCE is another story,ricky and lucy are a romantic couple but the things they do and allow have nothing much to do with romance but at least your tags are on the spot
I will reward you with 4**** ,reading other of your storys it became clear to me that your main storylines ewolve all around the same subjects:polyamorous relations,swapping and dominance and some more

Great story.

Love the story. I much prefer a nice long in-depth story like this.

loved it

I had a blast reading this story....Thanks for sharing.