You hooked me with the contents of the mom bag, and never let me go. That was the most erotic glass of wine I never drank. Your descriptions are sublime. I actually forgot where I was toward the end. Amazing writing.
Renee starts out (or just finishes) as a slave to her stagnant lifestyle as a wife and mother, but miserable from it since it is unrewarding, unexciting, and she has no real life of her own. It's hollow. Her purse is like her: a vessel that is there to mainly serve others. And she has to dig for that lipstick, which is just a shade beyond herself, it probably barely enhances her. She hasn't stretched herself in a very long time.
Her intense veneration for Stacey not only serves to further illustrate her submissiveness and humiliation, but also shows how low she actually feels. The tension, contrast, and balance you create between the two is excellent. And I am not surprised when she starts rubbing herself against that bottle of wine. She's practically ready to give herself over to Stacey the minute she sees her. Her child's at her breaking point, which parallels her own breaking point.
Also, I gasped upon finding out that Renee got pregnant on purpose. Wasn't expecting that at all, and thought it was an excellent addition to further flesh out her character.
Favorite line: "'Here I am. Take me, mold me. Make me something. Save me from the awful burden of being me.'" God!
Overall, I can't wait to see how this story unwinds and comes back together at the end. Hot, well-written, great dynamics. Excellent job.
This story goes beyond the erotic, though it has that, and then some. On the surface it is a hot sexy read, a power play between two very different women, where they both get what they want, what they need. It's a win-win-win (including us readers, of course). But it's also more than that. To capture so honestly the inner voice of a woman just discovering the submissive within ... the dichotomy of dread and desire, shame and lust ... the giving over ... finding the source of your power and in the next moment giving it away ... this was quite an achievement and I for one can't wait to read more.
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Wow!
Erotic, classy, creative. This is brilliant writing. Thank you.
Awww
This is so good! I can't bear the thought of her not going back! Oh please say she does!
Great Story
Please let there be more! Can't wait. Excellent job!
This was amazing.
You hooked me with the contents of the mom bag, and never let me go. That was the most erotic glass of wine I never drank. Your descriptions are sublime. I actually forgot where I was toward the end. Amazing writing.
Happiness in Slavery
Renee starts out (or just finishes) as a slave to her stagnant lifestyle as a wife and mother, but miserable from it since it is unrewarding, unexciting, and she has no real life of her own. It's hollow. Her purse is like her: a vessel that is there to mainly serve others. And she has to dig for that lipstick, which is just a shade beyond herself, it probably barely enhances her. She hasn't stretched herself in a very long time.
Her intense veneration for Stacey not only serves to further illustrate her submissiveness and humiliation, but also shows how low she actually feels. The tension, contrast, and balance you create between the two is excellent. And I am not surprised when she starts rubbing herself against that bottle of wine. She's practically ready to give herself over to Stacey the minute she sees her. Her child's at her breaking point, which parallels her own breaking point.
Also, I gasped upon finding out that Renee got pregnant on purpose. Wasn't expecting that at all, and thought it was an excellent addition to further flesh out her character.
Favorite line: "'Here I am. Take me, mold me. Make me something. Save me from the awful burden of being me.'" God!
Overall, I can't wait to see how this story unwinds and comes back together at the end. Hot, well-written, great dynamics. Excellent job.
A rare find
This story goes beyond the erotic, though it has that, and then some. On the surface it is a hot sexy read, a power play between two very different women, where they both get what they want, what they need. It's a win-win-win (including us readers, of course). But it's also more than that. To capture so honestly the inner voice of a woman just discovering the submissive within ... the dichotomy of dread and desire, shame and lust ... the giving over ... finding the source of your power and in the next moment giving it away ... this was quite an achievement and I for one can't wait to read more.
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