A Second Bite at the Cherry

My first story

This is my first ever story (and hopefu not my last!) so please post any comments and feedback.

Sue
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Romantic. I liked it. Despite a few typos I hope you write more.

Your first story....

...and I hope not your last. I really enjoyed the story especially the awkwardness moment that cause a gap in their friendship. Nice touch bringing them back to the source of their confusion. It would have been nice to had a peek into their first lesbian experience, there's a mention of Trinny having a bad experience with a girl call Liz and Sue said she let a student seduce her but then later on she said never done that before (having sex with a woman) so what happened with the student was it just kissing and groping or was it more. Overall I loved it. And I'll keep a eye on your next story or stories.

PS: Be careful with the typing mistakes or like me sometimes, my thoughts are faster than the writing so I ended up with missing words in my sentences.

so cute and fun

I hope it continues and that your fetish works its way in as well.

Just a small criticism

Get yourself a proof reader, apart from that a very good story. The few typo's distract from what was a very well written story. Keep it up

GREAT FIRST STORY

Thanks for an exceptionally good first story. You have the right stuff. The typo comments are important. Many of us(me) are partially dyslexic and easily mix up or leave out letters. So, have a woman friend proof for you. I'm really looking forward to your next story. You have potential; use it please.- ChristieP

Updated

Thanks for the feedback and sorry for the errors. I've corrected and edited the story very slightly based on the comments and am working on Part 2.

Sue
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Trinity or Erin?

You need to really watch the typos. Do NOT rely on any computer program to protect the quality of your work. Your stories are your dreams and fantasies and in a way your babies. Protect them carefully. Get yourself a proofreader definitely, but become your own toughest critic. Typos and mispellings or punctuation marks out of place seem like small things, but to the reader they are distracting. In the last few paragraphs one of the girls names changes from Trinity to Erin and this really threw me as I get really wrapped up in the characters of a story I am enjoying. This is a beautiful story that could have gone under 'Romance' as well as 'Lesbian', but I think 'Romance would have been more appropriate. They both admit to having and enjoying boyfriends so, though they prefer each other, they are really Bisexual. Trinity and Sue aren't just searching for a suitable Lesbian relationship, they are falling for each other. I liked your other story 'Overtime' also, but I thought there could have been a little more to it. Write more!

Wow Sue, _ Thank You. _ A Beautifully Written Story !!

And it's your first story?! I'm Katrina and I'm Gay. Yes, I spotted a few typos, where you hit an T instead of an R, just small things. Nothing so distracting that I didn't enjoy reading your story.

So again Thank You, I enjoyed reading this story....

Gay Kat.

Great story ;)

I love this story. I'm a sucker for sexual tension.

What a beautifully told love story. Well done :)

Lovely!

A lovely short story! You're soooooooooo good!

Thank you again!

L

Heartwarming.☺

I am very touched with how you went about revealing their infatuation for each other.

Very Nice, But...

Given your name and bio, I was hoping for some toilet play!

About the name

I believe the "Scatty" part of Sue's name refers to scatter brained not scatology. I very much enjoyed this story of a second chanch at love, the lesson here is to go for it when the time comes. Best of luck SS

Very good story!

Oh how I wished it was longer, but still, this was a very good story! thank you so much for sharing it with us!

Love your stories, and hope to read many more of them :)

For those who don't know, I and many others were tagged with Scatty followed by our name here in the UK. It does not always mean scatterbrained or disorganised, Scatty for a name is often used because we don't always act how others may expect us to. In my case for doing scatty and crazy things for devilment during my early teens, and knowing it would throw my friends.