The Band: On Tour

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not worth the effort.
1 star

hmmmm

This was supposed to be romance?

Was long, I like longer stories.
The writing was good.
The story was not.

So, good marks for writing, but this story needs to go, or be redone.

The plot was good, however the format of the writing was just horrid. Half the time you can't tell who is talking, then you have multiple people talking one after the other without a break to change characters. I learned in my first year of school, when I was 5 years old, that you always change character between different people talking. As an assumption based on how horrid this was written I'm guessing English isn't your first language? If it is, then you need to learn more before doing more stories. Also a lot of this was written like a to do list, put more detail into it. Read a book and see the style used for that. There is potential but you need to learn more before you can put out a decent story.