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by 1Browneyedguy04/11/14

Your first story ???

A little too short but still HOT!

I'd also think that there should have been more detail... but MORE please

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by Anonymous04/11/14

like married sex among strangers

Started too quick and was over quickly too. I thought a good story was building, then wham-bam-thank-you ma'am. Great first effort though. Next time prolong the build up and the sex.

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by leigh_cheri04/13/14

From me!

Glad to know there is an appetite on this site for more build-up (which I personally like too!)... the next one will be longer. Thanks for the feedback!

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by Anonymous04/15/14

The author clearly has writing talents

But hot sex in 1500 words? This feels like an etude, not a sonata, or concerto or a symphony.

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