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by rexbrookdale07/20/14

Commas

Your lack of use of commas gets in the way of clear flow of the story. Ironic, you might think, that the lack of commas would do so. To understand the meaning of a sentence, one has to re-read the sentence a few times before progressing to the next.

A good story, otherwise.

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