Great start to a true teasing series. Please continue with all the characters - more fun to cum lol
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Anonymous04/16/14
PROOF READ!!!!!
Example - " I admired how tighter her body was as she applied lotion to her legs."
'tighter'? Absolutely does not fit the sentence!! 'tight' perhaps, 'tighter' definitely not.
Several other silly errors that a simple reading of what you had ACTUALLY written, as opposed to what you intended to write, should have eliminated!
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great start
Great start to a true teasing series. Please continue with all the characters - more fun to cum lol
PROOF READ!!!!!
Example - " I admired how tighter her body was as she applied lotion to her legs."
'tighter'? Absolutely does not fit the sentence!! 'tight' perhaps, 'tighter' definitely not.
Several other silly errors that a simple reading of what you had ACTUALLY written, as opposed to what you intended to write, should have eliminated!
Very exciting
but chapters need to be longer!
Proof read?
Will try to do better but would encourage you to read other stories if typos offend you so.
great story
Love the story.. It has great characters and a good story line. Please continue.
the game is afoot
and the hens are chasing the fox.
delightful, so far.
btw, what happened to his wife?
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