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happy ending
that is so good that everything was so sexy made my pussy so wet reading about how good mom was that I was cumming with her by my self. might try to get my son to fuck me, he is only 17. wish me luck
Believable Fiction.
I know very well that the stories posted here are pure fiction.Some times I start getting a feeling that this might be a real experience. I love those writers who make me feel that their fiction is not fiction. I got this feeling occasionally in this story, but some glaring inconsistencies spoiled some fun. I am in my seventies and been reading Incest stories for the last 16 years, don't know the reason but love Incest stories including this one .Keep up the good Work.
that was great.
I loved the way she did some guiding and made him comfortable with it. and their love glowed through, so it was the sex didn't seem gross or selfish.as so many stories do.
in fact to some degree the contrast between the two couples a normal college,high school relationship. the other a deeper one' it was like putting drops of vanilla into a custard. even if the action was similar.
With seven healthy children, three of them, hubbies grand children. We have been e happily married 25 years and still love each other deeply. and a loving family. I . know the storyt is fiction, but it does happen in real life which makes it believ able.. .
Sampkyang, "The Dance"
Even I did take offence with this aspect, but apparently it is just to make point to Gary, that he is to take the role of her (supposed) husband seriously.
was good up until...
...you made his mother act like like a schizophrenic person.
I read through the 150+ comments, and only found a handful with any sense
to them.
They were, paraphrased, and in summary:
- don't let all the 'best incest story on the site' comments go to your head.
- not too bad for a first effort, decent mechanics, good plot arc.
- interesting & novel twist.
- get a good editor and keep writing.
As far as the rest:
- for all of you who can't understand the math error related to ages; it WAS a math error, get it? There was no confusion about it, nothing to understand, it wasn't due to poor writing, or a confusing explanation. It was, plain & simple, a math error. Jeez!
- to those of you who disparage the story because it contained fake boobs, shaved vagina, son impregnating mother, wife cheating on husbanding or a manipulating female character: USE the search engine, FIND a story without those aspects, and READ IT.
The author chose to include those aspects in the plot, THEY are the author, THEY can write whatever the fuck THEY want. Instead of saying it is 'a bad story', 'poorly written' or calling him names, you could always just say you prefer stories without those aspects. THAT is constructive feedback. If enough people agree, an author MIGHT be persuaded to leave those aspects out of a future story, to compare readers' responses.
A story is NOT bad because it contains something you don't like; get over yourself.
- similar to the above, to all those you say the author is bad because their story contains characters you don't like, grates on your nerves, or aggravates you. Did you ever consider the author might not like that type of person either? Ever consider that type of personality is what the AUTHOR decided was needed to move the plot in the direction, or manner THEY wanted it to move?
Or did you ever consider the reason the character IS unlikeable, IS grating or IS aggravating is BECAUSE the author actually did a GOOD job of developing the character?
You, the reader, liking, or not liking, a story, does NOT make it a good, or bad story. It does not impact the spelling, grammar or other mechanics. It does not influence the plot arc or continuity of the arc. The only impact your liking or not liking has, is if you finish reading the story, or read any other stories of the author. Your like or dislike is reflected in the number of reads statistic.
The 'star rating' is a rating of whether you think it was a good story or not, including, mechanics, plot arc, continuity, etc; all of the things which go into whether a story is good or bad. YOUR like or dislike of the subject, characters or plot is not what it is intended for. It is to tell other if the story is well executed & pertains to the genre, NOT if you like or dislike it personally.
There IS a difference, most people, well, half the people, well, some of the people get it. The rest need to figure it out.
GeoD
SO hold on hold on
You act like a scum of the earth slut to teach sonny boy a lesson. TELL ME what lesson is that??? You at best are a cheating cum sucking skank SO what would little boy gain with you??? TEACH HIM A LESSON???? PLEASE!
Side take...
I enjoy spending a little time on here when I have some, every now and, then reading exotic and, erotic stories but, I must admit that there may be perhaps only 1 of every few dozen which, offer any kind of substantive literary content smoothly wrapped into it's erotic content... This would one of those ones... Not sure I got into the side story of them sharing a room with another couple the way you wrote it but, because the interaction between them was only incidental at most, it was okay and, didn't distract from the romantic side of Gary and, his mom's love affair... You closed it out well too, so kudo's on a good 5 star effort... Nicely done...
Well. I liked it!
Sheesh. Some the assholes commenting here need to get a life check. Life is not Literotica. This is the imagination of the author. Author is human. Human make mistakes. For the mistakes in mechanics of this story, it is still a great story. Major, I liked it. Five stars, and keep it up big guy!
pity you turned the mother
into a fuck slut whore prepared to fuck any one and every one....any son would be pissed off...he should have given her a good smacking....
Great story!!
I loved it... only problem is what happened to the Jess and her boyfriend? Should make one final update to finish that off, like Jess and him go on a roadtrip and run into Amy and her son. Something like that
I love this story and everything you have written
Sorry for my lack of writing skills. But I feel I must post my thoughts.
I enjoy the intelligent story, of charters, their adventure, the inter-battle, growth and yes the sex. I have read all of your stories many times.
Thank you,
HappyMike01
This story
Is the first obe that after I came to it, I kept reading to the end. Great job.
Great Job
Almost perfect story. Loved every minute of it. No one had to "submit" to anyone else, no one was subjected to degrading name calling, every one came away a winner. Best of all possible worlds. I chose to assume the same best for Jessica and her man.
Very Nice Story
BUT mommy was and is an ASSHOLE SLUT. She should "ASK" if hubby minded she dance with another, NEVER GIVE AN OK or be taken out on the floor. This is a skank whore, NOT a teaching moment BLO! OTHERWISE this is a very well written story. You just FAILED in you description of THAT STUPID WHORE MOMMY. I wouldn't touch that skank with the proverbial ten foot pole! YOU can do a better job of writing...
Forget the negative shit
Yes there were errors BUT For the story itself. 5 stars
Very nice. Again
Not sure how many times I've read the story. But I've liked it every time. Wish you wrote more. Thank you.
You might need a late term 1st grader or better yet an expert 2nd grader for FUCKING MATH!
OK, OK hold up your little fingers..................IDIOT!
One little mistake
The story is one of the best I have read here, but you made one little but very annoying mistake. The main character's son kept calling her pussy a puss. A puss is a face, hence a sour puss is a sour or sad face. Sorry, I didn't invent the language, but that's the way it is. We are not allowed to abbreviate or shorten words anytime we feel like it for our own convenience even though many late 20th & early 21st Century people don't understand this.
Couldn't finish it.
No one is that brain dead. Especially once your in your thirties and have years of life experience. Took me right out of the story.
A very good read.
Ignore the critics, none of them were particularly constructive. Ok, there were a few errors, but they did not detract from a very erotic story; sensitive, involving and well told.
Keep them and your readers, coming. Well done.
Had to read it again
Even though it is incest category it is kinda light hearted yet romanic in its own way and kinda kinky but I like it.
Mack/ mcwhorter28445@gmail
Perfect
This was one of the greatest stories I have read on this site. It was kinky and sexy but also very romantic. I loved how you tied up all the loose ends and gave me a perfect ending.
Favorite
I'll have to say this is one of my favourites. I guess there might be one or two errors. She was supposedly knocked up at 16 and him 20, but when this story occurs he is supposed to be 40 and she about 38, I think. Math is a little off. I've always wondered how breastfeeding and milk production is affected by breast implants. And I (just on a personal note) don't really like the terms 'cunt' or 'puss'. Either word uttered in my house gets me a night or two in the garage with a trusty sleeping bag. But this is what I call a romantic comedy. The incest is important but not necessary to the story. Amy gave Mark 18 really important years of her life and it was time for them both to move on. They each deserved someone that matched them better a their respective times of life. He needed a more sedentary wife and Amy needed the younger and more virile man. And she loves him. So, great story!
Fantastic
Even though I personally never had a mom as sexy as her, and never wanted to fuck my mom, this story did keep my cock throbbing. Excellent story and very well written.
mm mm
great tale./ THE ONLY THING I MISSED WAS A brief mutually enjoyable SWAP.
Manipulation
The story is good but seeing of the comments I have to add that any women telling you that you have to watch her like a hawk to be a "big strong guy" in the club. Runaway from that shit as fast as you can. The son and the mother are scum in this story, I am sure everyone knows. Just letting guys know that the mothers manipulation in the club is not normal women behavior. If a women has to see men fight for her to feel good about herself then you are in a lose/lose no matter if you win the fight or not
Very nice story
I loved the mom/son tickling near the beginning of story. Rest of story is well written
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