ANY woman who isn't a total cunt would refuse a dance with another guy SO YOU AUTHOR FAIL ON COUNT ONE. your a bitch and do not know what love means like the rest of us.
by
Anonymous06/05/15
Fun enough
This is a difficult piece to assess. On the one hand, it is a light and airy read that moves along. On the other, it trivializes some fairly polarizing issues such as adultery, incest and pregnancy.
The characters are essentially stock (e.g. hung son with great stamina; stacked, gorgeous Mom; disinterested Dad {despite gorgeous wife?!!?]). Mom is given a little more to do here than usual. She is the main protagonist and instigator, and as written, is in control and can come across as manipulative. Her son is more than willing to be manipulated though.
The plot is silly to the point of being absurd, but then, we aren't reading it for the plot. The dialog works and the pacing is fluid enough. With only minor editing issues, this is a solid story. The author deliberately tries to keep it light so the more serious consequences of the character's actions don't distract, with varying degrees of success.
The X's and O's of the sex are handled well enough, and there is some real heat here. Unfortunately, the serious issues and the way they are handled, do detract from the erotic element. I still like the story well enough and you should definitely keep writing.
by
Anonymous06/07/15
shit that was unbelivebul
by
Anonymous06/10/15
tits
The only thing that spoils this story is the silicone tits, I hate them like, anything else that is false!!!!
In my favorites have read it numerous times. More of a love/mature than incest. Amy fell in love with her son Gary.They got preagnment her choice. Really a good fun loving story.
Fantastic story, one of the best I've read in this category. Hope to see another story out of you soon.
by
Anonymous07/01/15
My wife next
I'll do anything - and every thing - to get my wife to you. Shed thrive under your watchful supervision and aggressive sexuality!
(private message to follow with our contact info)
Josh Quinn
Did you really have to mess up a great sexy story by calling his cum 'dick snot'?
by
Anonymous08/15/15
Favorite
A bit of a twist it is more of a Mature/Romance story than Incest. Love is where you find it and who you find it with Amy fell in love with Gary her son a true deep love it has been in my favorites for quite some time. I would like to see a follow up story about Amy and Gary
Ron
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
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Anonymous08/30/15
Your math is wrong!!!!
If the mom and dad had the son at ages 16 and 20...and mom is now 34 then how can dad be 40 years old now? So unless I am missing something in the span of 18 years the father has gained 2 more years on his wife for a total of 6 years as opposed to being only 4 years older when they had their child. So in another 18 years the father will be 8 years older than his wife. Wow...you story defies logic.
You are obviously a meticulous author, and I think your moniker says it all. Nothing works the first time through with a few exceptions and I suspect you wrote and re-wrote. I thoroughly enjoyed your character development and continuity
Was with a woman long ago...until I found out she had a boob job. Lost interest almost immediately. Love tits, not silicone!!!
Your emphasis on the "FAKE" tits early in the story really fucked it up for me. Not sure about others, but that was major drawback. Fortunately you got away from that and it got better.
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Anonymous09/30/15
fake
fake tits and shaved pussy is a turn off for me. dick snot???
by
Anonymous10/09/15
spring break wife
i have read this work of art five times and loved it more each time it was beutifull loving and so sexy well done love john
Also, if any woman is intentionally trying to get knocked up by an 18 year old, let alone her son, and doesn't tell him, AND doesn't undertstand why he isn't thrilled, he should run fast. Even if it is the best pussy in the world.
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Anonymous10/20/15
So
It was fun until it wasn't. It got really weird when the mom got possessive of the boy then crazy about getting pregnant. I don't know, the story just took a really weird turn.
by
Anonymous10/20/15
love smooth pussy
Wow it was great. I remeber mom putting both feet behind her head. We loved sleeping together. I miss her. Wish my dauughter was that close to me. When she was young she love to cuddle.
You are clearly a gifted writer and this story was one of the best in here for mother-son. Lots of romance, despite the duty nature of mom. You kept me interested through so many sex scenes, an incredible feat!
Very well done, sir. Please keep writing! We will be most interested in your coming works and appreciate your literature.
I just wanted to fuck her. I didn't want to be husband and wife with her, I wanted to be her fuck buddy. I didn't want anything to look strange, or suspicious to others. I just wanted to fuck her whenever I wanted, and that was quite often!
i take a bit of issue with mommy and her lesson for her son during the first dance piece. yes son need to act like a husband, but mommy dearest doesn't need to act like a skank either. she was pure slut and gonna get her ass laid like it or not if she was alone and acting as she freely did. rape waiting to happen and then a sweet lesson for her dumb slutty ass!
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Anonymous12/04/15
Best I Have Read
This is best story on Lit I have read to date. Very believable, I wanted to fuck her myself.
by
Anonymous12/08/15
REALLY GOOD
A beautiful mom in love with her son so whats the big deal LOVE is where you find it. She loves him he loves her once thru college he gets a good job they move away where no one knows them have more children and live happily ever after. I have read it numerous times and it is in my favorites list ( it is incest but it could be in the romance section. Amy loves him she wanted to be with him so she used careful planning and got him. I have a question: Will there be a follow up story about Amy and Gary I really hope so.
Ron
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
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Anonymous12/19/15
Wow...with a mother like her, who needs a cheap slut lol.
First, she badgers her kid into going with her on spring break, puts him under a ton of pressure to act like her husband, and then when he doesn't behave the way she wants, she thanks him by threatening to find the next "real man" that walks by and fuck him?
And using pressure by asking him to not to ruin "Jessica's" vacation! Bullshit, she was using Jessica's vacation as a vehicle to cheat on her husband, and nothing was going to get in her way.
I'm glad the vast majority of these stories are based on someone's imagination.
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Anonymous12/26/15
Oh pulleeese!
So convoluted... Had to fast forward through it. Ughh
Well done story. You undoubtedly have a gift for writing, however, mom is as irritating as f@! $&!!!!! All of that pouting and carrying on. SHEEEEESH!! She has quite a whorish demeanor to say the least! Yuck!! Although I could've done with a bit more info on dad. *Just saying*
Keep that keen imagination going doll. Gift us with more writing plz.
Respectfully
Izzie
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Anonymous01/11/16
Reminds Me of A Happy Time
I liked this writing because it reminded me of a very happy time in my life. One of my Mother's sisters was 26 years older than I, and she was a drop-dead Gorgeous Woman with beautiful big firm Breasts and a totally beautiful, shapely figure. I was in love with her. But I did not realize that until one night when we were with a small group of my college buddies going to a drive-in grocery to pick up some beer to finish an apartment party. I had already had one or two beers and was pretty much uninhibited. at any rate, we were sitting in the back seat of the car, and she was so pretty. I could not help myself; I leaned over and kissed her, and she kissed me back... a complete turn-on. I was hooked. turned out my aunt liked me the same way. long story short, we had a beautiful affair. later I regretted not marrying her after I graduated from college. we would have had to move away to avoid fall the family criticism that would have followed. but we were so well matched. we really enjoyed being together. we stayed close and in contact for a long time.
by
Anonymous01/15/16
Different
Getting banged by your son as others look on and enjoy seeing a doggy style love nest by another couple.
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Anonymous01/19/16
Favorite
This is one of my favorite stories on this site. Liked the idea of a mother taking her son on a vacation to be pretended as her husband and have sexual relationship as a couple!
Good story had me hard asf the whole time reading it. If it was me I would have punished mom by doggy styling in her asshole each time she called pops. until she learned better or until I wanted it again 😆
Very nice writing author. I protest at fake boobs. I prefer A cups to D, but I like B/C's are the best. NEVER fake. I like women to have hairy pussy's too, not look like an under aged teeny bopper...
especially when he figures out that his Mom really fucked him.
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Anonymous03/08/16
Gets better every time I read it
There were a few errors once they said Jessica was blond and there were some words in there that did not belong but overall it is a really good story. Querious will there be a fo!!ow up story about Amy and Gary? I hope so. If you have written one what is it's name and what category is it in?
Like others I also caught that at first Amy was 16 and Mark 20 when she got pregnant with Gary; then when she and Gary went on Spring break together she was 34 (18 years later) but Mark was 40. I also caught that Jessica was first described as being brunette then she was blonde.Having written some stories myself it is very difficult to keep all details the same throughout an entire story. A very good story line, always entertaining and interesting. Hope you continue to write more submissions here.
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Anonymous04/06/16
Sorta
Amy sounds like she is a little bit of a skeemer. I think she decided to 'raise' a husband knowing that at some point she would outgrow her husband. I don't get the breast implant thing. I understand women being under peer and societal pressure, but in my experience a woman with 'A' cup breasts isn't going to stay an 'A' cup when she becomes pregnant. Even after birth they don't usually go all the way back like they were. But she knew what she was doing, even if he didn't. A woman is always very aware of her cycle and knows, sometimes physically, when she's ovulating. Most especially women of that age. I love this, but the reader needs to know that the last sentence is right. She's not the Ditzy blond that she's taken for.
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Anonymous04/08/16
This a neat story.
Very believable and well written.
by
Anonymous04/09/16
Some encouragement was deserved
I gave you a 3/5 on this first effort so as not to be too harsh on a beginner. I won't bother with the shopping list of silly things that had me rolling my eyes as I read this because in the end I powered through anyway.
Somehow you managed to hook me into wanting to see how it ended. You need to hook up with some sort of editing helper though before you drop any more like this. Snot and shit are never erotic terms to read in a love scene. I'll leave it there. Others have said enough.
If you take at face value all the comments that say how it's the best thing on the site, you will soon dwindle into nothingness. The truly good thing is that you snagged a whole lot of comments even if many of them are standard phony copycat praises. If you seek out some editing help, you actually can become better.
Choose.
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Anonymous04/09/16
i think a second chapter would be nice to let us know how things progressed with everyone
Premise a bit thin but counterbalanced by VERY hot sex...!
Not a huge fan of incest-plots obvious-but this caught my eye and number of comments made it look promising. I did wonder about lack of condom but figured she was on the pill.
I really liked how you spun this out, and I'm a sucker for happy endings.
It helped she and their roommates had to cajole him...then he really got into it...
Easily 5 stars, fave story.
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Anonymous05/13/16
Go Vols
Living in Knoxville, I loved the ending. More, more, bravo, bravo!
English
just a thought
ANY woman who isn't a total cunt would refuse a dance with another guy SO YOU AUTHOR FAIL ON COUNT ONE. your a bitch and do not know what love means like the rest of us.
Fun enough
This is a difficult piece to assess. On the one hand, it is a light and airy read that moves along. On the other, it trivializes some fairly polarizing issues such as adultery, incest and pregnancy.
The characters are essentially stock (e.g. hung son with great stamina; stacked, gorgeous Mom; disinterested Dad {despite gorgeous wife?!!?]). Mom is given a little more to do here than usual. She is the main protagonist and instigator, and as written, is in control and can come across as manipulative. Her son is more than willing to be manipulated though.
The plot is silly to the point of being absurd, but then, we aren't reading it for the plot. The dialog works and the pacing is fluid enough. With only minor editing issues, this is a solid story. The author deliberately tries to keep it light so the more serious consequences of the character's actions don't distract, with varying degrees of success.
The X's and O's of the sex are handled well enough, and there is some real heat here. Unfortunately, the serious issues and the way they are handled, do detract from the erotic element. I still like the story well enough and you should definitely keep writing.
shit that was unbelivebul
tits
The only thing that spoils this story is the silicone tits, I hate them like, anything else that is false!!!!
Daaaaamn
That was great!
sensational
That was so hot.
great story
In my favorites have read it numerous times. More of a love/mature than incest. Amy fell in love with her son Gary.They got preagnment her choice. Really a good fun loving story.
Ron
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
Fantastic story, one of the best I've read in this category. Hope to see another story out of you soon.
My wife next
I'll do anything - and every thing - to get my wife to you. Shed thrive under your watchful supervision and aggressive sexuality!
(private message to follow with our contact info)
Josh Quinn
DICK SNOT??
Did you really have to mess up a great sexy story by calling his cum 'dick snot'?
Favorite
A bit of a twist it is more of a Mature/Romance story than Incest. Love is where you find it and who you find it with Amy fell in love with Gary her son a true deep love it has been in my favorites for quite some time. I would like to see a follow up story about Amy and Gary
Ron
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
Your math is wrong!!!!
If the mom and dad had the son at ages 16 and 20...and mom is now 34 then how can dad be 40 years old now? So unless I am missing something in the span of 18 years the father has gained 2 more years on his wife for a total of 6 years as opposed to being only 4 years older when they had their child. So in another 18 years the father will be 8 years older than his wife. Wow...you story defies logic.
Well done indeed
You are obviously a meticulous author, and I think your moniker says it all. Nothing works the first time through with a few exceptions and I suspect you wrote and re-wrote. I thoroughly enjoyed your character development and continuity
No More FAKE TITS
Was with a woman long ago...until I found out she had a boob job. Lost interest almost immediately. Love tits, not silicone!!!
Your emphasis on the "FAKE" tits early in the story really fucked it up for me. Not sure about others, but that was major drawback. Fortunately you got away from that and it got better.
fake
fake tits and shaved pussy is a turn off for me. dick snot???
spring break wife
i have read this work of art five times and loved it more each time it was beutifull loving and so sexy well done love john
You had me until "dick snot"
Also, if any woman is intentionally trying to get knocked up by an 18 year old, let alone her son, and doesn't tell him, AND doesn't undertstand why he isn't thrilled, he should run fast. Even if it is the best pussy in the world.
So
It was fun until it wasn't. It got really weird when the mom got possessive of the boy then crazy about getting pregnant. I don't know, the story just took a really weird turn.
love smooth pussy
Wow it was great. I remeber mom putting both feet behind her head. We loved sleeping together. I miss her. Wish my dauughter was that close to me. When she was young she love to cuddle.
One of the best
You are clearly a gifted writer and this story was one of the best in here for mother-son. Lots of romance, despite the duty nature of mom. You kept me interested through so many sex scenes, an incredible feat!
Very well done, sir. Please keep writing! We will be most interested in your coming works and appreciate your literature.
Thank you!
Ditty not duty!
My previous comment said "duty nature"; I meant ditzy nature!
Again, a big shout out to your short story! Loved the cheating, the slow build up, the eventual love affair.
I never wanted to get my mom pregnant......
I just wanted to fuck her. I didn't want to be husband and wife with her, I wanted to be her fuck buddy. I didn't want anything to look strange, or suspicious to others. I just wanted to fuck her whenever I wanted, and that was quite often!
One of the best
This story was one of the best I've read
the dance
i take a bit of issue with mommy and her lesson for her son during the first dance piece. yes son need to act like a husband, but mommy dearest doesn't need to act like a skank either. she was pure slut and gonna get her ass laid like it or not if she was alone and acting as she freely did. rape waiting to happen and then a sweet lesson for her dumb slutty ass!
Best I Have Read
This is best story on Lit I have read to date. Very believable, I wanted to fuck her myself.
REALLY GOOD
A beautiful mom in love with her son so whats the big deal LOVE is where you find it. She loves him he loves her once thru college he gets a good job they move away where no one knows them have more children and live happily ever after. I have read it numerous times and it is in my favorites list ( it is incest but it could be in the romance section. Amy loves him she wanted to be with him so she used careful planning and got him. I have a question: Will there be a follow up story about Amy and Gary I really hope so.
Ron
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
Wow...with a mother like her, who needs a cheap slut lol.
First, she badgers her kid into going with her on spring break, puts him under a ton of pressure to act like her husband, and then when he doesn't behave the way she wants, she thanks him by threatening to find the next "real man" that walks by and fuck him?
And using pressure by asking him to not to ruin "Jessica's" vacation! Bullshit, she was using Jessica's vacation as a vehicle to cheat on her husband, and nothing was going to get in her way.
I'm glad the vast majority of these stories are based on someone's imagination.
Oh pulleeese!
So convoluted... Had to fast forward through it. Ughh
well
Well done story. You undoubtedly have a gift for writing, however, mom is as irritating as f@! $&!!!!! All of that pouting and carrying on. SHEEEEESH!! She has quite a whorish demeanor to say the least! Yuck!! Although I could've done with a bit more info on dad. *Just saying*
Keep that keen imagination going doll. Gift us with more writing plz.
Respectfully
Izzie
Reminds Me of A Happy Time
I liked this writing because it reminded me of a very happy time in my life. One of my Mother's sisters was 26 years older than I, and she was a drop-dead Gorgeous Woman with beautiful big firm Breasts and a totally beautiful, shapely figure. I was in love with her. But I did not realize that until one night when we were with a small group of my college buddies going to a drive-in grocery to pick up some beer to finish an apartment party. I had already had one or two beers and was pretty much uninhibited. at any rate, we were sitting in the back seat of the car, and she was so pretty. I could not help myself; I leaned over and kissed her, and she kissed me back... a complete turn-on. I was hooked. turned out my aunt liked me the same way. long story short, we had a beautiful affair. later I regretted not marrying her after I graduated from college. we would have had to move away to avoid fall the family criticism that would have followed. but we were so well matched. we really enjoyed being together. we stayed close and in contact for a long time.
Different
Getting banged by your son as others look on and enjoy seeing a doggy style love nest by another couple.
Favorite
This is one of my favorite stories on this site. Liked the idea of a mother taking her son on a vacation to be pretended as her husband and have sexual relationship as a couple!
Five Stars!
Outstanding story! I loved it.
Lls good read
Good story had me hard asf the whole time reading it. If it was me I would have punished mom by doggy styling in her asshole each time she called pops. until she learned better or until I wanted it again 😆
Hot Story
Very nice writing author. I protest at fake boobs. I prefer A cups to D, but I like B/C's are the best. NEVER fake. I like women to have hairy pussy's too, not look like an under aged teeny bopper...
WOW!
Loved the story! I had to reread it again the next day. It's been added to my favorites to be read again. Keep up the good work!
Its going to be a rough ride, . . .
especially when he figures out that his Mom really fucked him.
Gets better every time I read it
There were a few errors once they said Jessica was blond and there were some words in there that did not belong but overall it is a really good story. Querious will there be a fo!!ow up story about Amy and Gary? I hope so. If you have written one what is it's name and what category is it in?
Ron
cowboyridecc@yahoo.com
AND BABY MAKES THREE
Something about this seems wrong - yet very perfect.
Probably a great read...
but once I got to where she had breast enhancements, I stopped. Reckon' I'm just old fashioned, or maybe It's I hate vain women. To each their own.
A Very Good Story
Like others I also caught that at first Amy was 16 and Mark 20 when she got pregnant with Gary; then when she and Gary went on Spring break together she was 34 (18 years later) but Mark was 40. I also caught that Jessica was first described as being brunette then she was blonde.Having written some stories myself it is very difficult to keep all details the same throughout an entire story. A very good story line, always entertaining and interesting. Hope you continue to write more submissions here.
Sorta
Amy sounds like she is a little bit of a skeemer. I think she decided to 'raise' a husband knowing that at some point she would outgrow her husband. I don't get the breast implant thing. I understand women being under peer and societal pressure, but in my experience a woman with 'A' cup breasts isn't going to stay an 'A' cup when she becomes pregnant. Even after birth they don't usually go all the way back like they were. But she knew what she was doing, even if he didn't. A woman is always very aware of her cycle and knows, sometimes physically, when she's ovulating. Most especially women of that age. I love this, but the reader needs to know that the last sentence is right. She's not the Ditzy blond that she's taken for.
This a neat story.
Very believable and well written.
Some encouragement was deserved
I gave you a 3/5 on this first effort so as not to be too harsh on a beginner. I won't bother with the shopping list of silly things that had me rolling my eyes as I read this because in the end I powered through anyway.
Somehow you managed to hook me into wanting to see how it ended. You need to hook up with some sort of editing helper though before you drop any more like this. Snot and shit are never erotic terms to read in a love scene. I'll leave it there. Others have said enough.
If you take at face value all the comments that say how it's the best thing on the site, you will soon dwindle into nothingness. The truly good thing is that you snagged a whole lot of comments even if many of them are standard phony copycat praises. If you seek out some editing help, you actually can become better.
Choose.
i think a second chapter would be nice to let us know how things progressed with everyone
can you say hot, hot, hot?
said it already!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Chapter 2 Cumming?
haha, pun intended. so is the second one coming, maybe with mother son and new daughter?
I loved this story myself. I could see how this could have been true and/or could be a true story.
Premise a bit thin but counterbalanced by VERY hot sex...!
Not a huge fan of incest-plots obvious-but this caught my eye and number of comments made it look promising. I did wonder about lack of condom but figured she was on the pill.
I really liked how you spun this out, and I'm a sucker for happy endings.
It helped she and their roommates had to cajole him...then he really got into it...
Easily 5 stars, fave story.
Go Vols
Living in Knoxville, I loved the ending. More, more, bravo, bravo!
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