Celebrating the Miracle of Life

It's an okay scene, but a rather basic random hookup. It lacked a life-affirming level of passion. I was strongly distracted wondering about how he almost died and what happened to save him. You teased with that interesting set up, then left it high and dry.

This is only your second story here, so still a newbie. Cudos for sharing with us and please do keep writing.

Puzzled

Not bad writing, but had some trouble telling which woman was which, and how come they did what they did; was unprepared for what developed.

I really missed the dialogs here!