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Your stories vary in quality
because you're still learning. I admire your determination to persevere as a writer. This one gets four for effort from me. It deserves a sequel.
I don't usually like the abrupt change of POV in the middle; usually it's a sign of laziness by the writer. But in this case it worked quite well.
Thank you.
Great story
Great story . . bit different but really good . . thanks
Great story
Great story and a change from some of your others, at least there wasn't any forced sex in this one and it was kinda cute how he got her to jump him.
Another chapter is needed including his wife so she can feel how a womans body feels and be pleased and please another woman.
Hope she's on the pill but it sounds like her mother wouldn't put her on them.
Dirt Bag
This should be in the Nonconsensual category. First time stories SHOULD have a fairly happy ending as we want the (former) virgin to continue to like sex, not be afraid or put off by it.
In this one, hubby is just a garden variety dirt bag. He set her up for it knowing that she had no idea what she was going to feel or how to stop herself. Just because he gets her hot and she loses control doesn't mean it's not rape. Baaaad man!
Dirt bag
Hamster is right. Tim's a dirt bag.
He set the girl up and tricked her into it. I kept expecting him to back off after his "demonstration." No, scratch that--I expected him just to talk to the girl.
But he turned out to be a thoroughgoing rat.
This should go in the rape category, and Tim should have his nuts cut out.
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