... and this was a most enjoyable fragment. Sadly, that is about all it was - far too short to convey what you wanted and needed to say. Please consider rewriting and expanding it into something that shows your talent to its best advantage.
Thank you - three stars - and please keep writing.
I gave it three stars. There is some good writing there but it seems you had a not fully formed, or at least not completed, idea. Continue? re-write? Please keep writing.
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Too brief and isolated. What there is is well written, but the slice is too thin to enjoy.
You write well ...
... and this was a most enjoyable fragment. Sadly, that is about all it was - far too short to convey what you wanted and needed to say. Please consider rewriting and expanding it into something that shows your talent to its best advantage.
Thank you - three stars - and please keep writing.
I gave it three stars. There is some good writing there but it seems you had a not fully formed, or at least not completed, idea. Continue? re-write? Please keep writing.
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