Strip Poker

Better than good. Enjoyed the read. Five stars for sure.

good start

not bad, but not the best... there's a lot more to this story i think that coudl be explored in further chapters.

Nice babysitting :)

Stupid me...

It was 3am and I left a comment on another story saying I like it even though it was not my kind of story. This is the story I meant.

Finally

Laptopwriter got something right, his stupidity

3*

It has potential but it was too unrealistic.

shit we thought you had died DWornock

wishful thinking

OK, But...

Clearly a bloke writing it.

I know you ARE a bloke, but it really comes across in the writing - you unfortunately failed to capture any sort of female bent.

Apart from that, fine.

Implausible at best...

The flow of this story caught me completely off guard. It just doesn't make any sense. The first "penalty" is off the grid, and would never happen in a real-life situation. Of all of Ashson's stories that I've read, this is clearly the worst. I didn't vote, but if I did, it would get a 1*.