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Tempted and Teased in Texas Ch. 03

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous04/22/14

Pls continue!

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by Anonymous04/22/14

Where will this go next?

I like this story and it's characters, although I'm not convinced about sending it down the fetish side... A true exhibition & voyeur story doesn't need that element to tittilate!
Great work, looking forward to the next chapter. Keep it up!

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by writemarksmith04/22/14

Thanks for the emails and comments

The readership of follow-up chapters is so poor I'm actually not going to bother. New stories seem to be what drives the most interest.

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by Anonymous04/29/14

Yes, please continue

The problem with continuing stories is that there cannot be a long time between new sections. Tough to find but I do believe that you have a good story line. At least finish the story with the daughter. Not so into the mother issue.

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by Anonymous05/05/14

I'm interested in continuation!

Don't give up on this story! (and your others!) I'm really enjoying it. I want to find out what happens with Tina.

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by Anonymous06/07/14

Still Waiting

Really want to hear the rest of this story!

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by Anonymous07/24/14

Nice Job

Like this story very much. Hopefully you can find some more thoughts to continue. Thanks for what you've put forward so far all the same.

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by Anonymous07/27/14

Mark, please please continue! You've done the hard bit in creating believable characters and laying the ground work for Sofia to tease and cuckold her desperate little ass kisser - there's so many places you can take this now with the each girl teasing him separately in different ways, and then potentially them all finally teaming up together to break him completely and turn him into their chastised little foot bitch who'll do anything to stop Amy telling her husband that he jacks off on his daughter's feet. Amy could hold the key, Sofia teases him mercilessly and Tina occasionally steals the key and let's him cum on her pedicures toes, on camera of course so she's got blackmail material if he ever told her parents. Delicious levels of trouble he's got himself in, all set up by your first three chapters!

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by allaboutcontrol08/19/14

Great Story!

Love it, keep writing!

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by smallercuck08/27/14

Excellent

This is a great story and you are a fine writer. You've got the submissive make ego down perfectly.

If you ever need a proofreader, let me know. It would be an honor.

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by Sub_Hubbie09/23/14

Hot!

Loved it - I want to know what happens next. Could be a slippery slope for Mr Jack Brown! A nice slippery slope....:)

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by Sharko0111/30/14

Please do continue

I hope you'll continue forward with this series Mark.... I think it's fantastic...

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by Anonymous01/14/15

Please write more!!

This one of my favorite stories on Literotica!

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by rightbank01/15/15

perhaps the readership of subsequent chapters dropped off

because you didn't maintain the story you started. or keep the standard of your craft at a sufficiently high quality?

for example, How can Tina be out of town with her boyfriend and dive into the pool at the same time?

"Sofia casually pulled it back up, leaving only half of each ass cheek exposed for me.
"I'll got for a quick swim then let's catch up inside? Tina texted and said you were lonely over here."
I was about to respond but Tina dove gracefully into the water and began to swim."

and within that same example, what the heck does "I'll got for a quick swim" mean?

oh well, feel free to tell me to read something else because you can't be bothered to proof read your own work, like you did another commenter after chapter 2. but, think just a bit about the possibility that this might be why a good start dwindled down to almost nothing, as you wrote shorter and shorter chapters, switched categories (a kiss of death in Lit), and kept mixing story lines.

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by writemarksmith01/18/15

Great feedback re: need to proofread more

I read your stories and could not find even one mistake. Well done!

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by Anonymous03/08/15

so good...

i just found these stories and couldn't read them fast enough... are more coming? please...

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