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The Toybox Ch. 01

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by SumacandIvy04/23/14

Strong Imagery

Using the floor tiles is a great idea and bring immediacy to the action while giving insight into the character's condition. Though brutal, the story, or beginning of the story, shows promise and begs a second chapter.

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