But I must confess,if I were your protagonist, I would never even consider having a real relationship with this gal. The term you used, 'LBFM', was the correct one. Yeah, people change, and we all make foolish choices when we are young. (BTW, I liked your discussion on how we all make choices and mistakes.)
But since she already knows that he is in the top tax rate bracket income, you could never trust her motives. Plus, who would want a wife who will have sex with anyone who owns a hot car?
Keep her as a fuck buddy, and string her along... but don't let her get her claws into you! LMFAO! Even better — offer to pay her as an escort to keep it clean and impersonal. And if you hurt her feelings, well, tough!
But was a little disappointed in the ending - thought he may be wiser with age.
Still I do enjoy your writing - please continue to entertain us.
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Anonymous05/01/14
Is he Serious?
I enjoyed the story up till the end. She left the reunion with him because he had saved her from a bunch of crude loud mouths. Would she have been so willing to bed him if he was still driving a Honda Accord and making an average salary? She seemed rather shallow to me! I find it hard to believe that someone who has been as successful as he in business would still be interested in pursuing the "lady" with a long term relationship in mind.
As for the attacks on her at the reunion, the actions by her tormentors were those of 18 year olds. These men were in their late 40s or early 50s and would presumably have mellowed a little by then. If they chose to belittle her, I suspect they would have been more subtle.
He still has the mindset of a school kid. Both of them to need to examine themselves and grow up.
I like a fast car just as much as Lori does but they sure don't have me addicted like a drug addict. What if some other guy comes along with a better hot rod, is she going to jump into his car and screw him too?
Enjoyed this one also. Glad the men in the stories love tits, boobs, big boobs. Your detail on what to do with them is marvelous. Going back to read more.
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Anonymous07/21/15
Family
mentioned at the beginning were left out altogether from then on. For the Reunion, too many things just magically appeared, with no preparation. I do like your stories about people, and their feelings, hopes and dreams, usually. This story omitted too many of your 'normal' considerations.
I still liked it, just wanted your usual quality !!!
While I must point out that this story is one of my earliest efforts, I do appreciate your comments about my 'usual quality', as I have learned so much over the last fifteen months. Thank you for holding me to a higher standard, and I will try to keep up the good work. Perhaps a rewrite of this story would be justified?
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Anonymous07/28/15
Write on & on
You are doing it right. I just panned a couple of authors earlier because they were juvenile. You are doing yoeman work her bud and the result is truly enjoyable. Tnx, Lynn
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Anonymous09/21/15
Damned good
Perhaps a little brief in parts, characters slightly unclear, but a nice story
Thanks
HP
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Anonymous11/10/15
Good read
The story unraveled very well. You have a knack for good story telling. Please give us some more.
the characters have so much more to experience yet surely
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Anonymous02/11/17
Learned few - our critics
I just want to say how funny it is to read some of these pretentious comments. As if these cum-splattered people really were looking for - je ne se quois?
English
Fun little tale!
But I must confess,if I were your protagonist, I would never even consider having a real relationship with this gal. The term you used, 'LBFM', was the correct one. Yeah, people change, and we all make foolish choices when we are young. (BTW, I liked your discussion on how we all make choices and mistakes.)
But since she already knows that he is in the top tax rate bracket income, you could never trust her motives. Plus, who would want a wife who will have sex with anyone who owns a hot car?
Keep her as a fuck buddy, and string her along... but don't let her get her claws into you! LMFAO! Even better — offer to pay her as an escort to keep it clean and impersonal. And if you hurt her feelings, well, tough!
Unjoyed the story ...
But was a little disappointed in the ending - thought he may be wiser with age.
Still I do enjoy your writing - please continue to entertain us.
Is he Serious?
I enjoyed the story up till the end. She left the reunion with him because he had saved her from a bunch of crude loud mouths. Would she have been so willing to bed him if he was still driving a Honda Accord and making an average salary? She seemed rather shallow to me! I find it hard to believe that someone who has been as successful as he in business would still be interested in pursuing the "lady" with a long term relationship in mind.
As for the attacks on her at the reunion, the actions by her tormentors were those of 18 year olds. These men were in their late 40s or early 50s and would presumably have mellowed a little by then. If they chose to belittle her, I suspect they would have been more subtle.
He still has the mindset of a school kid. Both of them to need to examine themselves and grow up.
I like a fast car just as much as Lori does but they sure don't have me addicted like a drug addict. What if some other guy comes along with a better hot rod, is she going to jump into his car and screw him too?
Twist ending
The protagonist crashed his Aston Martin on the drive over and all of this happened in the embers of his dying mind, a la jacob's ladder.
happy happy
Enjoyed this one also. Glad the men in the stories love tits, boobs, big boobs. Your detail on what to do with them is marvelous. Going back to read more.
Family
mentioned at the beginning were left out altogether from then on. For the Reunion, too many things just magically appeared, with no preparation. I do like your stories about people, and their feelings, hopes and dreams, usually. This story omitted too many of your 'normal' considerations.
I still liked it, just wanted your usual quality !!!
Author here
While I must point out that this story is one of my earliest efforts, I do appreciate your comments about my 'usual quality', as I have learned so much over the last fifteen months. Thank you for holding me to a higher standard, and I will try to keep up the good work. Perhaps a rewrite of this story would be justified?
Write on & on
You are doing it right. I just panned a couple of authors earlier because they were juvenile. You are doing yoeman work her bud and the result is truly enjoyable. Tnx, Lynn
Damned good
Perhaps a little brief in parts, characters slightly unclear, but a nice story
Thanks
HP
Good read
The story unraveled very well. You have a knack for good story telling. Please give us some more.
But....
Another great story, but it's pedal, not peddle.
I would like more of this story too please.
the characters have so much more to experience yet surely
Learned few - our critics
I just want to say how funny it is to read some of these pretentious comments. As if these cum-splattered people really were looking for - je ne se quois?
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