But I must say that some misspellings detracted me from your delightful writing style. Never heard of a partitioned tent and wondered who they were and what they were doing the week before.
I kind of feel like this is a excerpt of a deeper story and we only get a teaser, sort of like the Mad Thumbs videos I access from this site. Just previews to get you to buy the complete version.
At any rate, thanks for posting what you did. Obviously I felt the need to drop my comments into the fray.
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A Nice Write!
But I must say that some misspellings detracted me from your delightful writing style. Never heard of a partitioned tent and wondered who they were and what they were doing the week before.
I kind of feel like this is a excerpt of a deeper story and we only get a teaser, sort of like the Mad Thumbs videos I access from this site. Just previews to get you to buy the complete version.
At any rate, thanks for posting what you did. Obviously I felt the need to drop my comments into the fray.
Awesome
Beautifully written for all the senses and a wonderful rhythm and pace, I enjoyed this enormously! My vote would be for endearingly naive.
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