After School with Sister

WOW

That was one hot story . Great build up you defiantly have talent . I can't wait for your next story .You get a 6 even if I can only officially give you a 5 .Keep writing and I'll keep reading .

Great story!

Thanks for sharing.

My Story

So much like my sister and me. Our first time was after school one day as well, 10 years ago, and even though we are both married now, we still fuck like animals when ever we can. Keep writing, it's like I'm reliving my youth through your story.

Excellent !!!

Really enjoyed the writing and the editing was good too.
"and grinded her"...." should be "ground." As in "find" to "found."

Very nice story

Sibling relationships can be wonderful and have a lot of benefits. It builds confidence and takes the pressure off. Must be careful and have right attitude.

I really like this story

I really like this story as both characters are likeable and the story is generally hot. Only thing I didn't like so much about the story is we didn't really get the sisters motivations. I would have preferred more of a build up and more of a subtle approach to the build up than the sister simply reaching into her brothers boxer shorts unexpectedly.

Still in saying that I definitely liked the story.

I liked this one

I couldn't help thinking how cute the sister acted. Typically, sis had it all figured and got what she wanted. It seems women seem to have the game plan and men sort of figure a game is going to be played. Things got a little warm over here and I'm pissed all three of my sisters have at least ten years on me. None of them could make me do anything other than say ewwwww. Thank god for genetic revulsion to say the least. I really liked this story.
RS

Great story

Give Tara's brother a bit of hair on that naked chest -- something between his pecs and around his navel for her to stoke lovingly while she blows him, or while she sits on his cock.

nice beginning.

it would help to know more in depth information regarding. each character

my sister

Love and fuck between a brother and his sister ,with their mutual consent is something extraordinary and beautiful,You must have experienced it to know how great it is.I fucked my elder sister Helena when I was 15 and her 24.Apart me and Helena,all the rest of the family had gone out to a musical concert.We were sitting on the sofa bed looking at a very hot movie.I had a cover on me and I could not prevent myself to play slowly with my already hardened cock,I got more horny thinking that my gorgeous sister was sitting near me with a very sexy short under the cover.I then noted that her cover was moving quickly and it was evident that she was playing with her clitoris.at a certain moment.I could not prevent myself to jack quicker and quicker and I looked at her telling her that the movie was too hot and apologise for jacking and she told me"Christopher,why are you apologising?I am already wet and also playing with my pussy.She uncovered herself and took out two of her fingers and asked me if I wanted to suck them.I was like a mad men.I sniffed and sucked her fingers which were full of her pussy cream.We then frenchkissed,and took off our clothes, .We sucked each other in a 69 position.Oh,it was great,I was eating her pussy and drinking her pussy juices like a nectar.She sucked me as if she wanted to eat my big cock.She then sat on that cock and rode me like a savage horse!!We then fucked in all sort of imaginable positions,She must have cum at least 8 times and me 4 timesWe then continued to fuck nearly everyday during 6 years and then we each got married Since then 20 years have passed and we still love and fuck each other when we have the rare possibilities to do so,

Mmmm

I loved this one! I like the way the brother was reluctant. Got me so wet!

Why would that be a super weird scene, I mean brothers and sisters, at least in my part of the planet, walk around in front of each other at home in their underwear all the time!

really nicely done

Time for the brother to return some oral favors.

It ain't fair.

I scored three sisters and not one was at all like Tara.
Best I ever got was 'Peeping Tom" through their window.
Nice yarn GratefulDude.

dam hot

I wish I was the sister

A good story, but flawed.

The story line here is a good one, but it's too rushed, and, as one commenter has already pointed out, we don't see very much of Tara's motivation. Even so, it would have worked well if it weren't for all of the technical flaws that a good editor would have picked up.

One of a writer's major goals must be to keep readers from thinking about the words themselves instead of the story. You've haven't done very well at that.

There's too much "swirling"; the past tense of "grind" is "ground"; "overtop" is a verb, not a place; one regales people--not a story; one doesn't "grab onto" a thing, one simply grabs it. And so on.

You might have picked up many of these mistakes yourself, if you had slowed down. When you've written a story, set it aside for a week or two. Then reread it carefully, and see if you've written what you meant--and meant what you wrote. The temptation to publish as quickly as possible is your enemy; treat it that way. And consider finding a good editor.

I wish I could give it five stars, but it's barely worth four.

It's a good story.... I love it.....

Yes, you had some mistakes and you'll learn from this time and the next one will be better. Letting some fresh eyes read the story before you publish it can only help to make it better. There is a list of people on here doing editing and there are probably even more that do editing but don't advertise it. I know because I do some editing.

I gave you five stars because I liked the story, the concept and the way you told it. There are times when I want to give even more stars but you just can't do that on here so I'll tell the author when I read a story like that. With a little editing, this story would have hit that target.

I think this story could be taken a few more chapters but that's your decision......

Obviously you lose all ability to read, write or think when you see a naked women

Her wider than the rest hips shifted and she threw down the white robe behind her. She put her hips on her waist and shifted her hips back to the right. Looking down at me like I was somehow supposed to critique her style. Which I admit was very good.

present tense

grinded should be ground

frfr

Y'all niqqas nastyy

It's a really good story but as some other pointed out there are some minor flaws that should be fixed. I gave it a 4.

continue this story please. love it

FUNNY

This might be the best line! 😄 "No," I said, "It didn't. Time's up. Leave my poor little guy alone." LOL "Leave my poor little guy alone" YEP, BEST LINE EVER!!!! And another fav line is "It's adorable!" So yep BEST LINES EVER!!!!! *pretend "Timber" is playing* (it might be good music during this comment or if you're reading those lines) ik i keep saying this but BEST LINES EVER &nyways adorable! made me laugh 😆 :/ THE TEXT SIZE IS SO SMALL I MIGHT AS WELL TYPE IN CAPS!!

Damn

I got so wet while reading this I started fingering and squirted everywhere !!!💦💦

Needs more

You should make more chapters this is really good

DAMN!!!

Wow this was great would love to read more

Hot

Makes a girl happy. And well written, too. It's good that the characters don't seem too adult for this to be believable.

Wow man

this is one of the best the way they were was awsome almost like me and my sis except not by mutch.

Sweet

defiantly in agreement with the hot comments.

Very Good

Congrats on writing a really nice one. Kind of romantic too as they got along well with each other before the games started, and they just responded to their natural needs and affection as things got hotter and hotter. I really enjoyed this story and hope you will like others similar to it.

A Rare Find Erotic Romance

Almost anyone can throw words on a page and come up with a piece of erotic drivel about sex between brother and sister...but this stands out head and shoulders above others. Brother and sister actually care about each other. And their feelings for one another grow. This story explores HER curiosity and HER aggressive pursuit to quench that curiosity.I don't know why society acts surprised and offended when a brother and sister explore their love for each other. After all, they've been "playing house" longer than a lot of marriages last. Brothers and sisters discovering they love one another is as natural as breathing.

I second that Awesome

I am repeat offender to this story. Well Done!

First Rate Tale

This is a beautiful story, well written and thoughtful, and told in a way that is kind to both brother and sister. The story sequence was absolutely right on, and I really enjoyed the way the sister was restrained enough to taste his cock, but then jack him off, to leave plenty to do on their next session. And even on the second tryst she rode his cock to orgasm, but didn't let him cum in het pussy, which is important at this stage of the story, because we don't yet know if she is on the pill, or in fact if they have any idea of continuing to fuck one another in future, I think you have left dome interesting questions unanswered, which suggests a sequel is in order. Hope you, continue the tale, exploring the depth of the sister's passion for her brother, and continuing on to further test the brother's hesitancy, and possibly also allowing him to explore his mother's strained libido when she becomes interested in how close her two children are becoming, Thanx for the great read, and keep on trucking!

Awesome! !!!

Thank you. This was a great story. Going to bookmark it for later.

Oh my..

Hot damn

Damn

I don't even have a sister to dream about

again

I've read this before & ill read it again, very well done.

yummy

last sentence is There was no mess!!!

Nice, but lame

Very nice story, but the end was lame. Of course he should have shot his load into his sister! That is where it belongs and where you want it if you bond like that. They are fusing together, making love, not fucking, loving each other. So they should go all the way. Because that's the purpose of it all. And from now on they will keep on doing this, as lovers.

NICE BUT, FLAWED

it's cute little head (its)
holding (-on) (onto) for dear life (-to)
her and my hand (hands)
handy work (handiwork)
grinded (ground)
giggled and touch (touched)
tanktop (tank top )
bare chested (bare-chested)
Her wider than the rest hips (CLUMSY WORDING)
put her (-hips) (hands) on her waist
her regale (me with) our pool story
LOWERING my pants even LOWER
Her hand has grabbing (was)
mind blowing (mind-blowing)
feel each other around each other (AWKWARD)
thrusting up and down with (my) cock
she had an orgasm (-but) (by) the way she
was good and taken care of (CLUMSY WORDING)
ever (with my) hand over her mouth
jerk myself of (off)
sisters hand (sister’s)
Except this times (time)
my cum dripped thumb (dripping)

Too bad

This was nice, a little flawed but don't worry, it's still impressive.
I would've loved it if u wrote about the blowjob, but never mind about that.
Keep it up! Good luck! 😉👍🏻

writeyourown

Good read To the ppl who nit pick write your own if you are so full of great ideas

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This was a game to her, and I wanted so badly to make her stop, but it just felt soooo good.
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Lol, somehow I doubt he really wanted to make her stop! At most felt embarrassed, but the hormones fix that problem quick ;)

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"I think I need a towel," she said.
"Ok," I whispered.
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...I think you need to lick it all clean sis...;)

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"Ya know.." she said, thinking, "We don't have to, like.. tell anybody or anything."
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Hehehe, that always gets me! Like, who am I going to tell, and why? 'Hey mom, you wouldn't believe what your daughter did to me after school today!' Or your buddy...'You know what? My sis DOES give an awesome blowjob! Who knew?' Lol.

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Something told me that deep down, I'd always wanted that to happened. Tara had probably been thinking the same thing for a while.
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Ummm, well yeah! Prolly since you got your first woodie and realized those lil panties were covering something really good!! ;)

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After dinner I was up in my room on my computer, reading news articles and whatnot. No music on or anything.
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Translation: I was looking at porn.

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Her boobs swirled around and around with each thrust, I grabbed onto one of them with one hand, and with the other I fingered her clit with my thumb. Swirling it around and around her clit while I fucked her pussy harder and harder.
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Thats actually a lot harder to do than it sounds, lol, trying to keep your balance and rhythm going!

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Now kneeling over her belly with my cock in my hand, I started jerking off over her. Aiming my cock up over her head, she grabbed my balls with one hand, and with the other she helped me jerk myself of.
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NoooOoo, dont waste it! Put it back in and fill her up!! :)


...granted, there were tons of word/phrase errors in the thing, but it was still a fun read! I think the only thing that kind of bugged me was the constant laughing. Haha, this and haha that, it got old fast! :)

Thanks for writing!

Very Lucky

I had four sisters never had that luck

Great

Loved the story. As commented by others would have benefitted from having a proof reader/editor give it a once over but would love to hear more of this story even without that.... Please keep up the good work :)

Brings back memories

My sister and I started fucking after I caught her and her boy friend fucking on her bedroom floor one night and she in turn caught me jacking off thinking about it. We had a great relationship after that.

Had a few moments with my sister

The first time with my sister was an accident. I thought it was her friend. They had been drinking, so as I was cuming in her, her girlfriend turned o the lights. We got caught by the one I thought I was banging. By morning her girlfriend wanted to watch me fuck her again. I said she's not drunk. I don't think she'll allow me to. Holly held her hands while I climbed between her legs. I stuck it in hard and fast and she started to scream no. Holly told her, you didn't mid him last night. As I leaned over and started kissing her hard. She finally agreed and we did it all morning while holly watched. After that day when we got home from school we would sneak off and have sex.
All the times I caught her after that she would apologize and make it up to me. I miss those days. Q

Great story..

Why do so many shoot their load on the sister instead of the warm feeling of cumming in their Hot, Wet Pussy?

I feel sooo happy when I fuck my sister; I never feels that kind of lust and love when I fuck my wife. I love my sister and her pussy.

A trip down memory lane

I couldn't finish this story before I was strolling down my own memory lane. My younger sister and I grew up sharing bed and baths when little. Even after our parents stopped making us bathe together we'd still occasionally share out of habit and company. At home, when alone, we'd occasionally share our bodies in innocent exploration, nothing naughty. In school we shared friends and when others would talk about us we'd exchanged information about what others said. We kept no secrets from each other.

When we started dating we eventually found out we were lousy in bed. Since we were both virgins and had only done oral with our love interests we knew it was about our kissing and oral that was being talked about. We talked about it in detail but did our own things to get better. We both knew of other incestuous relationships, among our shared close friends, but we weren't ready to go down that road yet. That changed one summer Saturday when my sister came home from a sleep-over when she eagerly informed me that she HAD to give me a BJ, right now!.

Never to turn down free head I let her. She was terrible but I was glad she was trying - on me. Soon she regularly gave me head. As she got better we added things to work on. Months later taking turns giving oral became normal. Then all of a sudden she stopped our private activities cold without explanation. I figured she had gotten serious. I was right. Three guys she was dating all proposed about the same time. She pick one of them and got married.

Some years later, I was visiting her when an opportunity came to privately ask about our past. It turns out she had lost her virginity that previous first BJ night in a threesome with her friend and her friend's older brother during her sleepover. Wow. She told me that the whole time she had been giving me head, it was to relive that night. Then she met her husband. He was confident, funny and kept things fresh in the bedroom. The stories she next told me blew my mind. Both my sister and her husband are Bi. They've been MUCH more adventuresome AFTER they got married than before. Their stories belong in Literotica and might be here somewhere