An outstanding effort. A "flashback" format that stayed exactly on track from ending to ending. Well written; humorous but realistic. And the sex was mostly just hinted at. Nice!
One correction: "Ryan decided he and two of his salespeople needed to be in Florida early to smooch potential clients." I believe the word you're looking for is "schmooze". I'll admit I don't know much about the advertising business, but I very much doubt that kissing and cuddling is a good way to attract new clients!
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This is good...
I loved your story. Easily worth 5 stars.
A REAL Short Story
An outstanding effort. A "flashback" format that stayed exactly on track from ending to ending. Well written; humorous but realistic. And the sex was mostly just hinted at. Nice!
Good story
One correction: "Ryan decided he and two of his salespeople needed to be in Florida early to smooch potential clients." I believe the word you're looking for is "schmooze". I'll admit I don't know much about the advertising business, but I very much doubt that kissing and cuddling is a good way to attract new clients!
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