by DawnJ
I like how the poem began to develop, Dawn, but I think you ended it too soon. The last stanza didn't work for me. I think taking the reader on a journey of several more stanzas with images of where sensuality and spirituality co-exist effectively and others where they bump into each other can show rather than tell what is in the last stanza.
Subtle ( Sukhmya in Sanskrit ) are Two states behind which lies the Causal ( Karana )