All Comments on 'I Am Two'

by DawnJ

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greenmountaineergreenmountaineeralmost 10 years ago

I like how the poem began to develop, Dawn, but I think you ended it too soon. The last stanza didn't work for me. I think taking the reader on a journey of several more stanzas with images of where sensuality and spirituality co-exist effectively and others where they bump into each other can show rather than tell what is in the last stanza.

Ashesh9Ashesh9almost 10 years ago
The Gross ( Jada in Sanskrit ) & the

Subtle ( Sukhmya in Sanskrit ) are Two states behind which lies the Causal ( Karana )

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