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by greenmountaineer05/01/14

I like how the poem began to develop, Dawn, but I think you ended it too soon. The last stanza didn't work for me. I think taking the reader on a journey of several more stanzas with images of where sensuality and spirituality co-exist effectively and others where they bump into each other can show rather than tell what is in the last stanza.

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by Ashesh905/05/14

The Gross ( Jada in Sanskrit ) & the

Subtle ( Sukhmya in Sanskrit ) are Two states behind which lies the Causal ( Karana )

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