It Started With Not Feeling Good Ch. 02

Okay

Alright we have a ch.2 in the books. Two words were not said by the cheating whore. "I'm sorry." Now a question needed for ch.3. "How long during our twenty-five year marriage have you been having affairs?" In your prologue you talked about family and how a 25+ year relationship is worth staying together? How about the 25 years was all built on lies and deception, infidelity and humiliation? In your 40 years listening can you answer that question?

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Terrible

You have just described a terrible relationship! She is a monster and he is a co-dependent. They need to understand who they are and to get away from each other. Her kids are better off without her in their lives. She is a selfish bitch and she will continue to be an evil influence to those around her. Especially because another generation is eminent, it is time to end this family pathology. The kids were right, send her packing. He is a nice guy, he chose peace rather than war with his wife in order to help the kids have a stable home life when they were young, he did his job, they are grown, he has to get out. Even if she hadn't been cheating, this is an unhealthy relationship and it is time to end it. He can find plenty of nice ladies out there who'd be grateful for a nice boyfriend or eventually a nice husband. Life is too short to waste any more time in a twisted marriage.

Martial counseling vs. marital counseling -

I thought they were going to be drilled on the manual of arms... I see the counselor now, looks like R. Lee Ermey... "What you maggots need is DISCIPLINE," he yells...

DAMN, MrVDog,

...you stole my thunder.

when did

social workers start being marriage counselors. This went from a story to a fairy tale.

Yes , Word Choices are a bugbear

it started with ' Session 1 Martial Counseling. by " in the synopsis. An error there usually indicates fun times ahead.
" Gleamed " is entry no 1 in the word choice contest. "m" and "n" are far too close together on the keyboard.
" over rule ", un-hyphenated and unjoined, was too easy.
" nodded no " perhaps shook his head 'no' . Nodding infers an 'up and down' motion.
" took the lead " yes, you mean ' was in front ', not as " stole the heavy metal" .perhaps a re-cast was wanted here.
......... and then, in the final paragraph, when we thought it was safe ...'councilors"

But the tale itself, Pretty d**n good, realistic, and a likely follow-on from Chapter one.
Cheers, and Thanks,
Kilroy.

To anon,

In this country, marriage counselors are CSW which stands for Clinical Social Workers.

The way you've stated it 40 years of experience could be 20+ people with 2 years or less each. That doesn't give me much belief in your credibility.

I have to agree with BBL, where is the sorry? Individual therapy, marriage group and now couples counseling. I hear (read) taking responsibility but I'm not sure there is proven remorse.

To many sick anonymous people. Out there

You shouldn't allow anonymous to write , so many are empty in their thought process and some are just virile with no stated reason for their sick reasoning.

Sort of pointless........you just messed up chapter one.

Even his children had more sense than the father to take the selfish cheating whore back. Is there going to be a chapter three where he starts eating creampies from the whore's snatch?

Interesting .....

Are you using an actual session(s) as the framework or just "best guess"?
Interesting read and looking forward to your next install.
Not many actual counseling tales .....

re: To many sick anonymous people. Out there

Interesting comments from someone who posted their comments anonymously. I hope you realize such a ban would apply to you, too. I also noticed that, despite your comments on others, you didn't mention one thing about the story. They comment on the story, you comment on them, and yet THEY'RE the ones who are "empty in their thought process". Right.

You can't change the past, only make amends for it - but

should be able to direct your own future. It hasn't been a happy marriage but there is huge investment and possibly loneliness and oblivion for one or both without it. Maybe 'sorry' will be the final word of the final chapter? 4*

I don't know much about councling

So this I good for me. I do think it would be much better to submit the story in much bigger sections. For example, the councling covered maybe 5 or 10 minutes of the session, so little that nothing much was discussed before part 2 of the story ended in mid air. You should at least finish a chapter to a point where the subject at hand is completed. Also when chapter 3 dribbles out, most of what you covered in chapter 1&2, stuff you struggled to get just right, will have been forgotten by the readers, thus loosing continuity.


Chilley

This is going to last a while

I hope this will be worth the wait. So far I like the writing and the story line. I too love to read about counseling sessions and how relationships can evolve after a trauma. Please don't string us out too long. And, thanks for the effort.

Not much development for a second chapter

Most I can give this effort is a keep writing 3*.

It's A Read**

Thanks.

2

pages of nothing ? start writing or quit

A good work in progress

Well done, keep the good words coming!

I like the idea of the story

Part 1 was a little dry and mechanical,and somewhat unreal,but still had merit.This is better,it does a decent job of showing counseling...but the 1 page is too short,it dumps you off in the middle of nowhere.Chapters need to push the story forward and leave you feeling like you have the,appetizer but want more

yup,

Just like in other coment i posted on another story similar with this one, its not her fault,is her fathers fault,wilicza, after a 25± years mariage of bitching, and whoring, why counseling?Counseling is a form of being absolved from your mistakes, and put it on the others, father , mother neighbor, dog, cat, etc..,but nobody cant complain because the doctor said so.the man in your story, lived his life as a pussy ,with his balls locked up in the attic for no use, and at the end he is going down still as a pussy.A 25 years mariage is your excuse? A mariage of wat?When you let your wife to wlk over you , she will lose her respect for you,and the same go for the wife, a mariage is a partnership not a dictature,o fuck it, you are to pussy wiped to understand,and centralcoast cruiser, go eat shit if you have a probkem wth their children, they did wright ,family comes first, and they did that..

Enjoyed it

Thanks for the offering.

This whole verb tense thing has you fucked up, hasn't it?

You change tenses like they were underwear.

"At this point tears begin to well up in John's eyes. For the first time since that day at the motel, she reached over and held his hand quietly."

Within ONE PARAGRAPH, you slip from present to past.

Inept and borderline unreadable.

Too big of a gap . . .

Between what you are obviously thinking, versus what you are actually writing. I think I can feel the emotion and energy in your mind, but your words and you style are rather dry and passive. Lacks energy and punch. Wish I could give you better advice, but its like trying to tell a budding chef what ingredients he used wrongly, or not at all. All I can tell you is that this offering is too bland, barely warm, and not well presented. But I will keep trying if you will.

one thing is

sure your not very bright

Not very bright ?

Mr. Anonymous says "your not very bright" . Four words, and he can't even get that right. Learn the difference between your and you're. It's taught in grammar school.

"my father was Southern Italian."

So?
A person's ethnicity determines their behavior? Wops are this, niggers are that, honkeys are over here and gooks go there? Hell, let's inject religion and just move the story to Interracial while we're at it?

Everyone is nailing it. The excuses (like the ethnicity) is pathetic.

Her level of betrayal, disrespect, and dishonor cuts deep and cruel.

The kids are all well into adulthood. The divorce would have a hellova very slight if any impact on their lives. They all know she is a whore. They won't be in the least bit of pain if he divorces her.

What the bloody hell does a grandchild on the way have to do with fuck all!

How is that grandchild's life affected one iota if this guy divorces the cheating cunt!

This whole damn thing made no sense except to portray him as a pathetic wimp wallowing in self pity when he is the victim of a cheating cunt.