Okay story, nothing great about it. The writing itself has not improved in nearly 3 years, chock full of grammar errors, misspellings, and use of the wrong verb tense or word form. You definitely earn your chosen name.
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Anonymous05/11/14
Hot!
Loved it! Very hot that he came inside her... maybe she will have a little bump soon ;)
Your stories get hotter but it is a hard read with all the grammatical errors. Get an editor.
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Anonymous11/04/14
Nice story
Great story. Please continue it. Have the brother go live with his sister, they find out she is pregnant, they fall deep in love and live happily ever after.
English
Okay story, nothing great about it. The writing itself has not improved in nearly 3 years, chock full of grammar errors, misspellings, and use of the wrong verb tense or word form. You definitely earn your chosen name.
Hot!
Loved it! Very hot that he came inside her... maybe she will have a little bump soon ;)
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Brother's sperm inside sister's pussy!
what an immature
jerk
Hot
Your stories get hotter but it is a hard read with all the grammatical errors. Get an editor.
Nice story
Great story. Please continue it. Have the brother go live with his sister, they find out she is pregnant, they fall deep in love and live happily ever after.
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