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One More Night

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by Anonymous

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by Magnetron05/12/14

You created an amazing structure by making those 'with you' stand alone. Repetition is indeed your ally on this one.

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by UnderYourSpell05/12/14

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That is so poignant, I like your rhymes and near rhymes. Thanks for the read and 5ed

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by Cleardaynow05/13/14

Missed commenting yesterday on this

This is very nice indeed. The combination of structure, repitition and plain words works very well indeed to convey the poignancy.

It is good to see you flexing your muscles and varying the styles and messages.

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by tazz31705/13/14

THE KNIGHT REFUSES

the damsels quest and request TK U MLJ LV NV

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