Constantly switching tenses at the beginning was both distracting and very irritating, plus the whole tenor of the story is creepy and more than slightly sinister; it feels like a pedo/pervert story, even though she's over 18. No stars, this story just feels wrong.
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Anonymous05/12/14
Super! Keep up the good work!
Your story of beginning to corrupt your naive young daughter is excellent. I encourage you to write several more chapters telling your avid readers how your innocent daughter becomes hopelessly enchanted by her increasing descent into sex and debauchery. I believe that your ability to write erotic stories is excellent. I hope that you ignore the comments of ignorant readers who, when they don't like a story, just don't have enough common sense to change the channel.
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Anonymous05/17/14
re: Super! Keep up the good work!
"I hope that you ignore the comments of ignorant readers who, when they don't like a story, just don't have enough common sense to change the channel."
As opposed to the truly ignorant ones who can’t stand it when others dare to have a different opinion? Ya know, you.
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Anonymous05/17/14
Loved it!
Make another chapter I loved it!
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Anonymous01/27/15
Why do authors write daddy daughter stories and then just ruin the mood and tone they set by calling her a slut or a whore? Fucking sad.
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Irritating
Constantly switching tenses at the beginning was both distracting and very irritating, plus the whole tenor of the story is creepy and more than slightly sinister; it feels like a pedo/pervert story, even though she's over 18. No stars, this story just feels wrong.
Super! Keep up the good work!
Your story of beginning to corrupt your naive young daughter is excellent. I encourage you to write several more chapters telling your avid readers how your innocent daughter becomes hopelessly enchanted by her increasing descent into sex and debauchery. I believe that your ability to write erotic stories is excellent. I hope that you ignore the comments of ignorant readers who, when they don't like a story, just don't have enough common sense to change the channel.
re: Super! Keep up the good work!
"I hope that you ignore the comments of ignorant readers who, when they don't like a story, just don't have enough common sense to change the channel."
As opposed to the truly ignorant ones who can’t stand it when others dare to have a different opinion? Ya know, you.
Loved it!
Make another chapter I loved it!
Why do authors write daddy daughter stories and then just ruin the mood and tone they set by calling her a slut or a whore? Fucking sad.
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