"If you can't please everyone, then you got to...please yourself." As Ricky Nelson once remarked.
The first three segments were written for people with their free hands on their dicks and limited attention spans. It is becoming something else. Feel free to skip the subsequent chapters.
The previous comments I do not agree with except for the chapters being to short. Keep it going. Also, the word he meant was "drivel" instead of "dribble".
I considered pointing out that "dribble" was something his pee-pee was prone to do in his pants, while "drivel" was something that frequently came out of his mouth. But I decided not to.
I agree that the chapters have been too short. Would have been better if three or more parts had been combined to make up each chapter. I am working on correcting that for the upcoming chapters. I'm not sure what the ideal length is, because personally I find it uncomfortable to read things off the computer screen for more than about 15 minutes at a time, but perhaps others do not have this problem. Let me know what you think in the future. I appreciate your input.
Apparently you're qualified to speak for all morons, so I'll accept that as a consensus of opinion. But then I wasn't trying to appeal to the moronic market. So once again, if you hate it so much, why have you read 12 chapters so far?
You've already stated that the chapters are too long, you're bored, and you now complain of insufficient character development. OK, I'll summarize the whole story for you: There's a Cherokee guy, and a little white girl, and they DO IT. And then they live happily ever after. THE END. Now you can go back to your old Teletubbies tapes and whack off.
I think this has been one of the more engaging stories I've read in awhile. It's not what I expected when it started, but like all good stories; it's evolved quite nicely. My kids have a saying, "Hater's gonna hate!"
Don't sweat the naysayers who only want to pick apart your creation. I like the short story aspect. You cover a wide range of things in a chapter so there's no need to have multiple pages/chapters in one Part. I can't wait for Jack to practice all he's learned on Jennifer... with mom's watchful guidance of course!
It's not what I expected when I started either. I'm not in charge anymore, just trying to keep up with the current.
The only destructive criticism has been from that one ignorant douchebag who is trolling the site and trying to discourage people. He accused me of padding the stat's so I suggested that he report me, and then I reported him. Haven't heard anything from the phony ass since, although I assume he's still voting '1' on everything I do. Maybe on everything anyone does, for all I know. No big deal. As long as people want to read my stuff, I'll keep posting it. I get free opinions, and the readers get to read a rough draft free of charge. Perfectly acceptable quid pro quo as far as I'm concerned. Surprising how difficult it is to get anyone I know to look at my stuff.
I can't say where the story is going, but I expect everyone will be together in the end. Somewhere, somehow. We'll all find out when it happens.
Thanks for your opinion. I'll keep it in mind.
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Anonymous05/26/14
anatomy ?
Ok so it was going well until he started butt-fucking her from in front of her (with them facing each other). how does that work? in most humans the butt hole is in back...
I'm tempted just to say "you'll understand when you're older," as I wonder if you are old enough to legally access this site. But I'll leave it at this: it is possible to engage in anal sex from a variety of approaches, both posterior and anterior. And I can prove it.
Friend the vagina and rectum are only a little distance apart. My love liked anal sex that way ass she got her clitoris massaged while the action was going on. More of an orgasm for her.
English
Eh
I was a fan for the first 3 chapters, now this is just dribble. The author is arrogant enough to think all his works require 5 stars lol
Losing interest
Story is getting boring and too many segments. Write the damn thing and be done with it.
Not constructive
"If you can't please everyone, then you got to...please yourself." As Ricky Nelson once remarked.
The first three segments were written for people with their free hands on their dicks and limited attention spans. It is becoming something else. Feel free to skip the subsequent chapters.
I think...
The previous comments I do not agree with except for the chapters being to short. Keep it going. Also, the word he meant was "drivel" instead of "dribble".
Right On Louis
I considered pointing out that "dribble" was something his pee-pee was prone to do in his pants, while "drivel" was something that frequently came out of his mouth. But I decided not to.
I agree that the chapters have been too short. Would have been better if three or more parts had been combined to make up each chapter. I am working on correcting that for the upcoming chapters. I'm not sure what the ideal length is, because personally I find it uncomfortable to read things off the computer screen for more than about 15 minutes at a time, but perhaps others do not have this problem. Let me know what you think in the future. I appreciate your input.
Thanks
Apparently you're qualified to speak for all morons, so I'll accept that as a consensus of opinion. But then I wasn't trying to appeal to the moronic market. So once again, if you hate it so much, why have you read 12 chapters so far?
You've already stated that the chapters are too long, you're bored, and you now complain of insufficient character development. OK, I'll summarize the whole story for you: There's a Cherokee guy, and a little white girl, and they DO IT. And then they live happily ever after. THE END. Now you can go back to your old Teletubbies tapes and whack off.
Keep Going...
I think this has been one of the more engaging stories I've read in awhile. It's not what I expected when it started, but like all good stories; it's evolved quite nicely. My kids have a saying, "Hater's gonna hate!"
Don't sweat the naysayers who only want to pick apart your creation. I like the short story aspect. You cover a wide range of things in a chapter so there's no need to have multiple pages/chapters in one Part. I can't wait for Jack to practice all he's learned on Jennifer... with mom's watchful guidance of course!
Thanks, OneEye
It's not what I expected when I started either. I'm not in charge anymore, just trying to keep up with the current.
The only destructive criticism has been from that one ignorant douchebag who is trolling the site and trying to discourage people. He accused me of padding the stat's so I suggested that he report me, and then I reported him. Haven't heard anything from the phony ass since, although I assume he's still voting '1' on everything I do. Maybe on everything anyone does, for all I know. No big deal. As long as people want to read my stuff, I'll keep posting it. I get free opinions, and the readers get to read a rough draft free of charge. Perfectly acceptable quid pro quo as far as I'm concerned. Surprising how difficult it is to get anyone I know to look at my stuff.
I can't say where the story is going, but I expect everyone will be together in the end. Somewhere, somehow. We'll all find out when it happens.
Thanks for your opinion. I'll keep it in mind.
anatomy ?
Ok so it was going well until he started butt-fucking her from in front of her (with them facing each other). how does that work? in most humans the butt hole is in back...
Oh My, Anatomy Indeed
I'm tempted just to say "you'll understand when you're older," as I wonder if you are old enough to legally access this site. But I'll leave it at this: it is possible to engage in anal sex from a variety of approaches, both posterior and anterior. And I can prove it.
To Anonymous
Friend the vagina and rectum are only a little distance apart. My love liked anal sex that way ass she got her clitoris massaged while the action was going on. More of an orgasm for her.
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