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You Make Me Feel

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by Matryoshka05/20/14

Simple, yet poignant

This is a nice poem. Just two suggestions to possibly improve the flow of the poem:
> Switch the second and third set of lines around - this shows the progression and links one to another
> move the word 'enough, up to the previous line - where it is now there is emphasis on it implying "just enough to get by" instead of what is accomplished
Very heartfelt and I connected with the poem more than you could imagine. Thank you for sharing it.

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by Oldbear6305/22/14

I love the way you feel, Storm

expressed so nicely. Brave enough to face your demons, little one

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