dont let the other commenter's get you down, if you have a highschool deploma and the interest to read creative sexy Writing, i was able to edit it on the fly
looking past the grammatical errors, this story was extremely erotic, playful and sexy. i would recommend high quality word processing software such as Microsoft word (my personal favorite, even on my MacBook Pro, or Apple Pages. spelling and grammar check are built in on Word. And like other posters, a Literotica editor can be of a big help. Oh and don't quit, i think you have a nice little story here!
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Anonymous05/31/14
Hey be nice.
I actually like the story. And to say the truth; I actually love the story. Have you ever considered that maybe the author has an English disability? I thought so. Keep writing girl!
Sweet story. Granted it needs editing really bad, but the premise underlying the misspellings, poor grammar and need for more information to really flesh out the story, is a good one. Don't be discouraged, and for God's sake don't discard this story. Just work on it. Pick one problem area, fix it, then move on to the next. Find someone to help you out with editing and proofreading. Most of all, don't give up!!! You posted a story, just think how many people visit here and never find the courage to do that. Good luck with your writing.
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Anonymous08/02/14
horny and abused
great story good plot and story telling.Look forward to more your stories.
English
you need an editor
Too many grammatical and spelling errors... Extremely difficult to read!
Good story
but pls turn to an editor for help with the language.
English
isn't constructed or written this way. Neither is the spelling.
Please get an editor or learn "their" doesn't = "there." Possessive is with " 's ", etc.
I was intrigued
But I couldn't finish reading it due to the grammatical errors :(
dont let the other commenter's get you down, if you have a highschool deploma and the interest to read creative sexy Writing, i was able to edit it on the fly
looking past the grammatical errors, this story was extremely erotic, playful and sexy. i would recommend high quality word processing software such as Microsoft word (my personal favorite, even on my MacBook Pro, or Apple Pages. spelling and grammar check are built in on Word. And like other posters, a Literotica editor can be of a big help. Oh and don't quit, i think you have a nice little story here!
Hey be nice.
I actually like the story. And to say the truth; I actually love the story. Have you ever considered that maybe the author has an English disability? I thought so. Keep writing girl!
Sweet story
Sweet story. Granted it needs editing really bad, but the premise underlying the misspellings, poor grammar and need for more information to really flesh out the story, is a good one. Don't be discouraged, and for God's sake don't discard this story. Just work on it. Pick one problem area, fix it, then move on to the next. Find someone to help you out with editing and proofreading. Most of all, don't give up!!! You posted a story, just think how many people visit here and never find the courage to do that. Good luck with your writing.
horny and abused
great story good plot and story telling.Look forward to more your stories.
despite the spelling...
...and grammar issues, the story remains sweet and pretty hot.
It just needs a bit of a polish!
I'll be looking out for more of your stories.
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