I can see why you put it in this category, despite the responses of the others. There's some strong, complex emotional content here, which is nice, even if it is a bit depressing. And I did find the names a bit confusing, here and there, but. Interesting. There should be more stories like this on the site, ones with a bit of heft to them.
Is it clear that Jenny is the daughter, using wigs and disguises to protect her identity, or does that not really come through? Is it clear that the stepmother is complicit in helping Nicki pull off her disguise as Jenny? This is what I intended, but it's not really clear if any of that comes through for the reader.
I'm not sure how else I could do it to make these points clear, but would love any suggestions or thoughts you might have. Thanks!
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Anonymous05/22/15
nasty nasty nasty
And by nasty, I mean made me squirm. So Jenny was his daughter all along, which means stepmom was helping her. That's dark as shit. ;)
Dad was a clueless wanker. Seriously. He never finds out or maybe he just can't admit the role he played in making her a star. Price of fame indeed!
This is just the type of story that I prefer to read. Ticked all the right boxes, every single one, and was an enjoyable read all the same. I like dark stories, and this hit the nail on its head. Sorry, but I don't think I have anything meaningful criticism to offer on your story. I don't wanna say something that splits hair and makes me look like a dumbass at the same time.
A Category for this story is the tricky part. It doesn't have incestuous sex, but has elements of voyeurism. I'd say Incest/Taboo is still your best bet despite what that anonymous commentator said twice in the comment's board. The crowd in Voyeurism won't appreciate incestuous elements in their turf. Better stick to a place where it won't be trashed.
I rated it a 5*. For the writing, for the effort and for the story.
It was well deserved.
Bard.
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Anonymous05/21/16
I agree with the Author , none of the other categories fit this story
and the main focus of the story is the taboo relationship / developed by the father and his infatuation with the Jenny character who looks so much like & obviously upon reflection is his daughter Nicki ... The fact that he saves his daughters webcam activities and watches them frequently & the fact that he contiues to seek out a porn model / actress who looks like ( and of course is his daughter even though he consciously denies it until confronted with the undeniable ) Surely makes this Taboo & incest .. although the incest is only in Thoughts & fantasy .. rather than Actual actions
and lets not forget the interplay between father & stepmother .. where they frequently Roleplay daddy/daughter scenarios
i guess it might have been posted under exhibitionist / voyeur
but personaly i think the Author nailed it with Incest/taboo
the closing lines to the story really intrigued me
and after a very easy web search
surprise , surprise the inspiration for Nicki
Nikkiprice.com
very pretty, very toned, fit, small breasted sexy porn chick
voted 5 stars for the story
i found it well written , interesting & engaging
with some delightfuly complex & compelling protagonists
xxxTwistedOliverxxx
wish i could vote an additional 5 stars
for introducing me to the delightful videos of
Nikki Price.
I'm so pleased you get the story, TwistedOliver! Reading your comments on this story started my day off the right way. I worried that people wouldn't understand where I was coming from this story, but your analysis is spot on. Thanks for taking the time to jot a note. And thanks for the generous score!
And thank you for sharing the "real" Niki Price. She is cute. As you surmised, I began this story with inspiration from a model, a young woman whose video I found on one of those amateur sites.
English
Ameteur
Not an incest story. Learn to categorize properly please.
Problems
Not incest.
Also confusing as Becky is a shortened version of Rebecca
Different
I can see why you put it in this category, despite the responses of the others. There's some strong, complex emotional content here, which is nice, even if it is a bit depressing. And I did find the names a bit confusing, here and there, but. Interesting. There should be more stories like this on the site, ones with a bit of heft to them.
Thanks
Good to get that feedback about the names.
Sorry about the category! I wrote it as a confession, but none of the other categories seemed like a better fit.
I'm curious what readers think about the character Jenny-- the young model the father is infatuated with.
Is it clear that Jenny is the daughter, using wigs and disguises to protect her identity, or does that not really come through? Is it clear that the stepmother is complicit in helping Nicki pull off her disguise as Jenny? This is what I intended, but it's not really clear if any of that comes through for the reader.
I'm not sure how else I could do it to make these points clear, but would love any suggestions or thoughts you might have. Thanks!
nasty nasty nasty
And by nasty, I mean made me squirm. So Jenny was his daughter all along, which means stepmom was helping her. That's dark as shit. ;)
Dad was a clueless wanker. Seriously. He never finds out or maybe he just can't admit the role he played in making her a star. Price of fame indeed!
My Type of Story
This is just the type of story that I prefer to read. Ticked all the right boxes, every single one, and was an enjoyable read all the same. I like dark stories, and this hit the nail on its head. Sorry, but I don't think I have anything meaningful criticism to offer on your story. I don't wanna say something that splits hair and makes me look like a dumbass at the same time.
A Category for this story is the tricky part. It doesn't have incestuous sex, but has elements of voyeurism. I'd say Incest/Taboo is still your best bet despite what that anonymous commentator said twice in the comment's board. The crowd in Voyeurism won't appreciate incestuous elements in their turf. Better stick to a place where it won't be trashed.
I rated it a 5*. For the writing, for the effort and for the story.
It was well deserved.
Bard.
I agree with the Author , none of the other categories fit this story
and the main focus of the story is the taboo relationship / developed by the father and his infatuation with the Jenny character who looks so much like & obviously upon reflection is his daughter Nicki ... The fact that he saves his daughters webcam activities and watches them frequently & the fact that he contiues to seek out a porn model / actress who looks like ( and of course is his daughter even though he consciously denies it until confronted with the undeniable ) Surely makes this Taboo & incest .. although the incest is only in Thoughts & fantasy .. rather than Actual actions
and lets not forget the interplay between father & stepmother .. where they frequently Roleplay daddy/daughter scenarios
i guess it might have been posted under exhibitionist / voyeur
but personaly i think the Author nailed it with Incest/taboo
the closing lines to the story really intrigued me
and after a very easy web search
surprise , surprise the inspiration for Nicki
Nikkiprice.com
very pretty, very toned, fit, small breasted sexy porn chick
voted 5 stars for the story
i found it well written , interesting & engaging
with some delightfuly complex & compelling protagonists
xxxTwistedOliverxxx
wish i could vote an additional 5 stars
for introducing me to the delightful videos of
Nikki Price.
thank you!
I'm so pleased you get the story, TwistedOliver! Reading your comments on this story started my day off the right way. I worried that people wouldn't understand where I was coming from this story, but your analysis is spot on. Thanks for taking the time to jot a note. And thanks for the generous score!
And thank you for sharing the "real" Niki Price. She is cute. As you surmised, I began this story with inspiration from a model, a young woman whose video I found on one of those amateur sites.
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